First thing I find is that it sounds a little flat.Only the pad sound has a wide feeling.Vocals kinda sound detuned against the detuned lead ironically.
I think a few more percussive bits , especially up the mid/high scale wont go a miss to fill it out a bit.

Vocals sound like you literally found someone on the floor.Drunk or dead possibly.

Overall , not my style at all but it would fit in well somewhere if it had the touches of percs I mentioned.

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