First of all this is not trance, I consider it "Bigroom House". But I post my songs up here because this is the forum that I always come to for production help and I have learned most of the things I know about producing from here. Let me know what you think.

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Why confuse the issue with a genre prefix like "Big Room"? (rhetorical question really)

The vocal phrasing doesn't fit your remix very well. Apart from key and, maybe, tempo, it's completely unrelated to the rest of the song. There's some good ideas but, honestly, not relating to the original work, at all.

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The track is really cool, but the vocals just don't fit at all in the arrangement. Try to time warp those so you can match up on the BPM for the vocals and track itself. Using something like mixmeister bpm analyzer on the original, or googling for the bpm can give you a starting point for speeding them up. I think it is listed as 88 BPM, so it'll be a little tricky to get things right.