Next time try to embed your SoundCloud track to your thread to possibly get more comments

As far as your production - cool and interesting melodic idea which could be develop to something really danger lol but (in my opinion only) you will have to reconstruct some of structural arrangement first to lift your work to another level - don't particularly like this lead which comes around 1:15 and 2:43 but again it is my personal preferences so you may disagree with me on that, also you have some unused space in your freq to fill, try to either use some FX or add another pluck to it -> just my $0.02

Cheers,

Darek

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lol cheers for the critique....its my first ever dance track so keep that in mind ....ill only get better....modern dance is soooo cheesy !!! Thanks again ...the space you speak of makes sense and i wrote the track with vocals in mind to fill that gap but i cant sing ...ill add u to my soundcloud , by the way nice tracks on your page !

Last edited by Seven Doxian on Jun-11-2013 at 03:03

god that lead is fucking cheesy

the rest is not that bad.

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Originally posted by Seven Doxian add u to my soundcloud , by the way nice tracks on your page !

Lol, thanks mate, most of my WIP is private so what you actually can see/hear on SC is not current

Cheers mate,

Darek

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The intro is good and I like the lead that comes in. Don't think it needs that piano outro at the end. A bit too repetitive without vocals... Is it possible for you to do a version with vocals? This could be a really good track with vocals on.

thanks !! the track was wrote for vocals then it would sound much fuller and i could change the lead to compliment the vocals but i wont write a true lead until i hear the voice it must share space with...so until then i stuffed an eighties cheesy steve winwood type lead ...lol hence the name "cheesy pop" ...its more of a fun tune and messing with different genres and trying to improve my production skills...but other than the lead any production errors you can hear...thanks again guys for the listen...