well here's an honest opinion:

it sounds too "simple", you need to work on the transitions coz its just too boring for me...
melody sounds are too simple, not much going on there, the track has a true potential to become a mint track (might be alittle cheesy too...)
i liked the piano part, but please man, work on your transitions! it sounds like you couldn't wait to put it here...
spend some more time on it coz this tune could sound awesome.

I can truly say that this track was probably made in couple of hours... maybe more, but still, not enough...



goodluck.