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You really need to work on the mastering. The clapping-snare sound that comes in around the 14 second mark is a bit too loud, causing it to be really "in your face".
The Synth sound you have come in around the 48 second mark, comes in a bit too early, I would continue with the percusion for another 4 bars, before bringing it in. The vocals around the 1:24 mark I would get rid of, or put them very faint and continue building up, you should still be adding more instruments. After the little mini break down around 1:25, the track sounds very empty. The snare roll gives the listener an idea that something will happen when nothing major does. Perhaps you could add a harder kick drum?
The original melody sample (1:38 minute:second mark) you should bring in "from low and up." start very faint and bring it in gradually.
You could get rid of the first major build up (2:22 - 3:40) as it just leads to another build up which is much better sounding.
The peak of the build up at (4:39) add a harder beat to it with more cymbals, the Synth does a great job carrying the energy of the tune but it needs some support from the percussion which gets lost in the background somewhere. Watch the key on the Melody sample around 4:57, it sounds off too me.
The break down (5:36) could be structured better, perhaps a longer Synth fade out? It just sounds too sudden.
The clap sounds like it speeds up around 6:26
Great Build up! but once again the listener is left with the feeling of dissapointment at it's peak. Work with the percussion make it the hardest, and crazziest part of the track. Bring in the different Synth sounds you use around 8:20 here as well Once again watch the key on the melody sample (7:51).
The final break down is very nice, except for the melody key it really sounds off to me.
The track starts of very nice and has lots of potential but I find that it's not going anywhere. It seems to be taking us in a big circle 2 times before it ends. Adding more to the peaks will change that very easily.
Over-all, I think you have some serious production talent, you just need to play around and find out for yourself what works and what doesn't.
Can't wait to hear your next tune.
P.S. What did you use to make this?
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