Seems like some parts are lacking percussion. Is that something you're still adding?

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piano part was unbearable. The chord voicing was extremely awkward, the quantized playing made even more excruciating. If something isn't quite that great, at least have it hidden in the mix. Don't solo it. The form is quite weird starting with that beat-less intro and then bringing back the awful piano without really doing anything to it. Right now you have 3 elements. Don't ask for advice until it is somewhat near finished. This sounds 1% finished.

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Originally posted by Mad for Brad piano part was unbearable.

What he said...


If you want my advice... I would say scrap it and start over. You may want to take some time and just listen to some music and how its put together. From what I hear it seems as if you don't actually have much of a keen ear for what sounds good, or maybe you just threw a random chord down and slapped a kick to it and thought hey.. music? Not trying to totally flame you, but I feel if you want advice on what direction to take a track... perhaps you need to learn the basic elements of EDM in general, make sure you at least have those, and come up with a decent arrangement for it. Another thing is; Playing your whole melody in piano is very boring. Try adding different sounds into the mix, and perhaps a counter melody.

And it sounds even worse at the break. Bro the timing does not work and either does the melody. It sounds like your piano just drank a 12 pack and is spitting out random drunk notes.
Then when the beat comes in hitting the same key over and over does NOT work.
In fact, yes, you should just scrap it. And are you using monitors? The kick sounds thin (extremely theres almost no low end at all), and the entire track lacks dimension/depth. Almost like I'm listening to it in 1D.

I'm not sure what you're referencing with but it sounds pretty bad on my headphones (which I monitor everything with). Even with sound quality aside this is the type of mix you just want to start over from bar 1. G/luck! And if you need help with anything feel free to ask.

LOL, guys... this is NOT a track... just musical idea, to get started and extract thinks I find interesting,, here is how is developing:

Temptations, developing, intro.. by MISE

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Originally posted by Mise LOL, guys... this is NOT a track... just musical idea

PUT IT IN THE CORRECT FORUM

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Again.. the melody is horrible. Not only that, now you have managed to add an obnoxious filter sweep that lays in the background just to support my original idea for you to just delete the idea. No one wants to hear a melody decked out in full piano.

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The track is not finished, sounds are not shaped nor mixed yet.

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LOL, guys... this is NOT a track...

After your done contradicting yourself... Realize what a track is. Tracks start off as ideas (Duh); Just because its not complete doesn't make it something else.


You wanted feedback... we gave you feedback.. Mainly circling around how horrible the melody was and yet still you post an "Updated" snippet... with the same horrible melody. It may work well trying to impress your friends, the ones that are hearing impaired that is, but here it just isn't going to fly. Sorry to come off rude, but when I tried to be more civil about it... it seems that the point didn't cross you well enough. Good luck on your future projects, but I have to say this one just isnt going to turn any ears.

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Originally posted by Aurana Again.. the melody is horrible. Not only that, now you have managed to add an obnoxious filter sweep that lays in the background just to support my original idea for you to just delete the idea. No one wants to hear a melody decked out in full piano. After your done contradicting yourself... Realize what a track is. Tracks start off as ideas (Duh); Just because its not complete doesn't make it something else. You wanted feedback... we gave you feedback.. Mainly circling around how horrible the melody was and yet still you post an "Updated" snippet... with the same horrible melody. It may work well trying to impress your friends, the ones that are hearing impaired that is, but here it just isn't going to fly. Sorry to come off rude, but when I tried to be more civil about it... it seems that the point didn't cross you well enough. Good luck on your future projects, but I have to say this one just isnt going to turn any ears.

Bro take it easy,, I have no problem with critics from people I respect, btw listening to your las tune, "they watch over us original mix": The melody its so fkn reapeated over and over again, just horrible man,, btw, try adding a kick, and bass to your track. The synth sound is fine.

Ill work on that when you actually find a pair of ears that work.

plz I ask the moderator to close this thread.

There should be a section to post projects in progress..

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Originally posted by Mise plz I ask the moderator to close this thread. There should be a section to post projects in progress..

There is called the MUSIC PRODUCERS PROMOTION

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