Kudos to you for being able to do that. its way better then I could do.

sequenced very well.
sounds are amature - obviously you prolly didn't use any hardware, or perhaps very old or inexpensive hardware.

the bass line only has 2 notes though B and D - and i find it very hard to create a whole song around only 2 notes - so you did a good job doing that with your various melody layers.

rhythem is good
beats are good with variety
good luck - you are on the right track

for an amature I rate it 8/10
for a professional I rate it a 2/10 - sorry was that not nice or is that ok

your main riff has got potential... keep building around it. but the sound that comes in at 7:53 ( i dunno how to describe the sound.. i hope you know what i mean, =P... its kind of like a muffled growl?) is really out of place... it sticks out like a sore thumb... just my opinion.. keep up the work, =)

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