Ow.. more that notice the offkey thing.. i cant quite hear it myself.. my ears arent that trained.. but i think ur right.

The tune itself is in the key of A Minor.. and the choir is sampled from the original. Anybody with a trained ear who can hear what pitch the choir is in ?

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sounds to me that the bassline does not fit but thats just my opinion... choirs sounds to samply for my taste... nice FX... nice padwork... u should add more breaks imo... percussion are abit boring for my taste... nice synthwork... kick is very nice... ok tempo... you should add some more happening to your track... IMO its way to dragged out... good luck on this...

-MeloslavE-

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Hey subtle

I listened yesterday, so I'm commenting now.

I like the intro percs, they fit well...bass is nice too, but as mentioned before it may be off key with the choir sample...though I give you a big thumbs up for trying to remix this track, it's a hard thing to do seeing as the original is so great. But you definitely gave it the subtle style

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Thanks.. rich and meloslave..

Im currently putting it offline until i have fixed the issue.

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I hope you put the tune back up!

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Originally posted by Nemesis44 No you are not the only one, as you said there is definately something not right. It's not the only place it happens and sometimes its with some other elements. Cheers Nem

Ok Just checking! After a second listen I'm sticking with my orig review. I still really like some elements of the song but that choir or bass that is off seems to ruin the song for me, which is a shame. I'd love to hear some progress on this!

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Originally posted by harris b Now look, subtle... I hope you put the tune back up!

Hey harRis, ive replaced the track with a sample.

Happy2Listen, im on it.. just gotta summon some expert help

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The intro percussions sounds really funky.
I'm not sure I like the second kick(?) or is it something else but it's too upfront.
The bass is too standard. Add a bit more resonance to it and maybe some minor delay.
Yup the bass is dissonant when the choir comes.
The break is nice.
You did make the lead bigger. It works.
I'm expecting some arpeggio below it. You like to add arpeggios lol what happened?
The percussions still sounds really funky and not porgish subtle style imo. I still like them.
I need more interesting elements in the build up.
Maybe a melody that will work above that choir.
Change the bass sound and the pattern it is really annoying and it doesn't fit to the track.
Try to make a more driving bassline so the track will be more driving.
This can be easily a club track. Just work more on it.
The length is fine.

Omer

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nice pads in beginning, (i dont know the original mix)

nothing wrong with the cymbals imo.. just maybe a little too "straight forward" 1:18 sounds cool nice buildup, a heavier/punchier kick would be nicer imo. maybe fill up the beginning with some percussions to keep the tune in balance. overall a nice tune but its missing something yet i dunno what.. maybe some arps or a second melody in the beginning to give it a bit more variation.. nice tune! would love to hear the finished version

good luck.,


Bidor

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Thanks Drow and Bidor.. gonna make it my life`s work to make this remix good.

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Track updated and done.

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