Registered: May 2005
Location: Belfast/Ibiza/Manchester
0:54 you have the bass chord progression which sounds quite amatuerish and not catchy at all. i like the track how it starts. i mean carry that on until 0:30 then id like the kick come in. at 0:54 id have a ripping arped bassline similar to marcel woods. would make the track much catchier and rocking.
melody at 2:30 sounds ok id try and develop that further. turn it into something emotional then add your pads etc.
im not feeling the melodies after the breakdown either. just isnt doing anything for me. once the track is over i cant remember much about it apart from the bassy synth.
Originally posted by Rinster
well not really "Unknown"..
Armin Van Buuren played my track "Out The Water" on ASOT 307..
and so did Markus Schulze & Dj Amps from Amplified Digital etc..
The original mix?
As for the track itself:
Being a percussion freak I couldn't help but to notice most of your percs sound like they're loops. There are no fills/variations and they sound very... processed (for a lack of a better word, I can't really describe it). The track seems to have some sort of an identity crisis. The opening and the drum/perc section make it seem like it wants to be a techy/harder track but then the break comes and that fluffy riff combined to the ugly saw pretty much ruins all that. You really need to get rid of that saw and focus more on that fluffy riff thing.
I would also have to agree on the lack of low-end other people mentioned, the kick in particular seems to get lost in the mix. Also, some of the hihats are just way too loud... and I really doubt that's an encoding issue.
All in all, this track kinda left me confused. The opening suggests this could actually be something but then it doesn't really go anywhere. While not being bad, it doesn't really have anything that would make you remember it either. It just kinda goes past you unnoticed.
As for the track itself:
Being a percussion freak I couldn't help but to notice most of your percs sound like they're loops. There are no fills/variations and they sound very... processed (for a lack of a better word, I can't really describe it). The track seems to have some sort of an identity crisis. The opening and the drum/perc section make it seem like it wants to be a techy/harder track but then the break comes and that fluffy riff combined to the ugly saw pretty much ruins all that. You really need to get rid of that saw and focus more on that fluffy riff thing.
I would also have to agree on the lack of low-end other people mentioned, the kick in particular seems to get lost in the mix. Also, some of the hihats are just way too loud... and I really doubt that's an encoding issue.
All in all, this track kinda left me confused. The opening suggests this could actually be something but then it doesn't really go anywhere. While not being bad, it doesn't really have anything that would make you remember it either. It just kinda goes past you unnoticed.
really appreciate you for posting a review like this. ill see what i can do about that saw in the breakdown.. maybe i should make a whole new intro? i actually quite like it like this.. what else could i do to the track to give it more low end? a 2nd bassline? or maybe just a bass boost? i think maybe the background melodies in the climax are a bit to soft maybe i should turn them up a bit. really interesting post man. tnx
Originally posted by Rinster
really appreciate you for posting a review like this. ill see what i can do about that saw in the breakdown.. maybe i should make a whole new intro? i actually quite like it like this.. what else could i do to the track to give it more low end? a 2nd bassline? or maybe just a bass boost? i think maybe the background melodies in the climax are a bit to soft maybe i should turn them up a bit. really interesting post man. tnx
I don't think you should change the intro, I just said the intro promised something different than the tune actually ended up to be. The intro is good.
Secondary bass might be a good idea (something like what Sterilis suggested up there). Also, if you turn those hihats down a bit that might help too.
I'm not too fond of the beginning. the bass sounds a little muddy and boomy.
i like the second part of the song a bit more though
keep working
Jan-15-2008 16:06
3F05Q
is a horrible artist name
Registered: Sep 2006
Location: Seattle . . . . . Skill Level: Mediocre At Best Clothing: Sometimes
Rinster, diggin' the beats. Needs some percussion fills, as has been stated already.
Some low-mid range fast-attack fast-decay would be nice to have dancing around in the mix.
But man, that lead. It hits that blue note and throws me off a bit. The sound you're using for it is a bit lonely. Perhaps some longer notes and toying around with filters to give it some motion might be nice.
Adios.
Jan-16-2008 09:28
Takkra
Smile if you want it.
Registered: Feb 2005
Location: Nijmegen, The Netherlands
I'm not feeling it man, sorry. The arrangement works mechanically imo, but for me, nothing sticks out.
My ears are wanting to hear something from the low end for this song also.
Jan-18-2008 22:35
djmij
Junior tranceaddict
Registered: Jul 2007
Location: Port Macquarie
It's pretty good, I think the breakdown should do something a bit different as it just plays the same melody that goes throughout?!
ps i like the start its cool!
Jan-19-2008 08:43
Gusarin
Junior tranceaddict
Registered: Nov 2006
Location: Trance Dimension
Cool Suff mann, i like it hehe, ure getting better and better, i see that in your tunes - as long as youre progressing further its good hehehe - i would try improve your buildup a little after the break ends and i know i listened 128 quality, but still i can hear some leads too weak, try boost them a bit so they can be felt in the track properly cause they are good! nice job mann
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Jan-20-2008 22:20
Takkra
Smile if you want it.
Registered: Feb 2005
Location: Nijmegen, The Netherlands
