thanks naeblis, I am writing another one right now about rejection. I'll post it in a few mins

Here is that poem

Childish antics due,
Blasphemous acts directed at you
I took a hit
and the dealer made me bust,
Always thought blackjack was my game
Always thought I knew how to please a dame
Can fate be blamed on the irresponsible?
Nonetheless I would on those who act civil

i have another called Let's make a deal

You forgive me for missing you so
and i'll forgive you for being so cold
You forgive me for the loud racing of my heart
and i'll forgive you for not hearing it
You forgive me for playing your games
and i'll forgive you for toying with my emotions
You forgive me for finding you so attractive
and i'll forgive you for not noticing
You forgive me for raising you up so high
and i'll forgive you for bringing me down so low
You forgive me for wanting to be with you
and i'll forgive you for avoiding me
You forgive me for being so pathetic
and i'll forgive you for taking advantage of me
You forgive me for not being able to let go
and i'll forgive you for never having latched on
You forgive me for having hopes and dreams
and i'll forgive you for crushing them
Forgiveness brings inner peace
Do we have a deal?

Last edited by narcism on Nov-14-2002 at 12:14

Tight poem babe
anything anyone writes and means is good

quote:

Originally posted by InAcoma i have another called Let's make a deal You forgive me for missing you so and i'll forgive you for being so cold You forgive me for the loud racing of my heart and i'll forgive you for not hearing it You forgive me for playing your games and i'll forgive you for toying with my emotions You forgive me for finding you so attractive and i'll forgive you for not noticing You forgive me for raising you up so high and i'll forgive you for bringing me down so low You forgive me for wanting to be with you and i'll forgive you for avoiding me You forgive me for being so pathetic and i'll forgive you for taking advantage of me You forgive me for not being able to let go and i'll forgive you for never having latched on You forgive me for having hopes and dreams and i'll forgive you for crushing them Forgiveness brings inner peace Do we have a deal?

one of the better poems i have read in quite a while. kudos! :Stongue


did you feel it?
cold breath on the back of your neck
she's still here
haunting the crumbled hallways of my mind


i just wrote that because i felt guilty about not having a poem for this thread. sorry it sucked.

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