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Originally posted by SystematicX1 Dood, this is such a beautiful lush track. Love that sub, it's perfect. Not to fond of the intro claps at the beginning as they remind me of video game machine guns..lol sorry Your breakdown, right before the sub so reminds me of monday bar..always loved a sliding bass. Man..I have no crits at all man,sounds really good on the ears and you actually want it to continue going. Imho this has got to be one of your best tracks. Solid ***

Aw thanks for the kind words man! Yeah the claps in the intro not very important I could just scrap them. I think that part is more meant for the breakdown to help the beat come back in. I haven't heard Monday Bar in a while but I definitely grew up listening to that kind of stuff.

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Originally posted by SystematicX1 I have no idea what this is becoming yet it has grown on me in a short period. Drumstep? I dunno

Sounding good - needs some massive trap style jerky / chopped up leed now..

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Originally posted by Evolve140

I enjoyed the video - I actually like it best when the track was just based around that deep synth with not much else going on.

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Originally posted by rubez i have graduated to the big leagues.

lol

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any criticisms? what is missing? (apart from drums)

This is actually sounding really, really nice. I really like it. Add some hats and other perc. some breaks and some filtering of the sytnh part and weaving it in and out, and you have yourself a fine track right there.

I'd say that track is pretty perfect Alpha, nice work.



Revision 2.5: its still has incoherent transitions still debating where to take it from here; maybe scrap the intro.

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Originally posted by MSZ I'd say that track is pretty perfect Alpha, nice work.

Thanks, dude. Wasn't sure about structure and a few other things, doing it live again, but I guess I'll leave it and move on.

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Revision 2: its still incoherent, doesnt make sense and has no flow. Gonna rest on this one for a bit.

As I mentioned before, I still like the beginning and now that you developed it a bit more, I like it even more. It's relatively simple, but has a nice flow...although I'm still not sure about the synth that comes in after 1:30 or so. It may work, but perhaps introduce it in a better way? Not sure. If you're feeling stuck, resting on it may not be a bad idea, or just finish it.

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Originally posted by MSZ Revision 2.5: its still has incoherent transitions still debating where to take it from here; maybe scrap the intro.

I'd say that's nearly finished, just add an intro and it's good to go. Pretty solid - nothing fancy, but groovy and decent and flows much better.


Feel like this needs work, but not sure it's worth redoing. Maybe better to just leave as is?

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Originally posted by AlphaStarred I'd say that's nearly finished, just add an intro and it's good to go. Pretty solid - nothing fancy, but groovy and decent and flows much better.

Thanks im probably gonna dump it, I see the errors, its too washed out in general. Something that would save it is some mono contrast dry shit, but I dont think It will get there. New project time.

And honestly, cant give you any feedback on your music so I wont even try.

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Originally posted by MSZ And honestly, cant give you any feedback on your music so I wont even try.

I hear you. I went for a more dj friendly, happy 90's vibe with this one, think I want to leave as is:

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Originally posted by AlphaStarred I hear you. I went for a more dj friendly, happy 90's vibe with this one, think I want to leave as is:

definitely feeling the 90s manchester rave vibes with this one.

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Originally posted by LoveHate definitely feeling the 90s manchester rave vibes with this one.

Thanks for listening. Not sure about the flow and structure, but hopefully it works...