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Originally posted by The Drow The track itself is something like 4 or 5 minutes witch is really short for trance. The sound programming isn't good and sounds like you haven't putted much into it. The track has a total commercial feeling to it and the fact that the vocals doesn't have a real message annoys me. I review as I listen. I didn't want to give you full critic because I wouldn't have anything good to contribute on how to improve it. I just dislike it and I have nothing helpful to say on how to improve it. I didn't want to be harsh for no reason at all. Cheers, Omer

Ok, thats your oppinion, we ll take it like that, thanks for sharing!

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No problem man.
Always remember, it's useless to write a distructive comment that won't help at all.
I'd appriciate if you can review my track on the front page.

Omer

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Anuga mentioned this production on his site, so I gave it a listen, and here are my comments:


The music:
You should make a longer intro, it builds up too fast.
E.g. only breakbeat for 8 measures, then add that high pitch sound on top for 8 measures, and then the background, and so on...
The breakbeat drum is weak; thud, thud - should be thump, thump. Check out Hybrid or The Crystal Method, or similar.
Could use some darker sounds, e.g. change A flat to G sharp, deeper bass.
Loose some BMPs, 128-132 is more moody.
Let the music fade out completely before the track ends.

The vocals:
First of all, try to suppress your accent/dialect. I know Swedes have a hard time with it but it has to be done.
A bit nasal, but not disturbingly.
Pronunciation, pronunciation, pronunciation.
Longer vowels, feel my emptiness -> feeeel myyy emptineeess.
The message in the lyrics doesn’t get through due to reasons above, and that's a bit disturbing.
I won't comment on the content of the lyrics, as that is not essential to sound.
The effects at 2:09, 3:47 could be better. Faster echo to match BMP.
Bad recording equipment?


Keep producing and singing and the quality should improve in time.

I would agree with comments above...but certainly you produced pretty good tune here...

I like the vocals, but they are a bit hard to understand really :-(

you have really nice voice... :-)

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Thanks a lot for your comments guys.
Helpful advices @ "Groundline" and i agree with the "softness" of the breakbeat, BUT i dont agree with the build up. I personally like it that way, dont know, but i think it fits. lol
However thanks for your suggestions

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Last edited by PhilB on Oct-12-2006 at 09:15

really nice track - good production IMO but i'm not 100% sure on the vocal.

Thank you Elektro_Tek! Why don´t you like the vocal? Is it my voice or something with the mixing?