Starting with your track:
You don't seem to have a bassline in there at all which immediately makes the tune lose a great deal of drive and punch. Also, the synths sound very "softwarey", more tweaking/FX is needed. This is particularily noticeable in the piano - it just doesn't sound real but obviously sampled. The melodies are very nice otherwise.

Onto your friend's track:
This one is all over the place. It has ideas coming in an out at a waay too fast pace. Also, the way some synths are panned to the left side is just confusing. I'm not even going to mention the cheesiness of the vocal (oops, I just did... oh well).

All in all, I'd say your track is better because it's more focused whereas your friend's track is bouncing all over the place not really knowing what direction it wants to go.

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heh. what a forum welcome!

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Originally posted by Derivative heh. what a forum welcome!

"Be careful of what you wish for, you might just get it"

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"Be careful of what you wish for, you might just get it" '

telling it like it is

i love the directness of your first reply. no bullshit. no welcome to TA! skip the pleasantries and straight on with whats wrong with the tunes!

Thank you mystery for your reply.

Can I ask you in more detail what you mean by bassline? I've studied many trance songs and most of the time the bassline is just the same quarter note repeated over and over, one eighth offset from the kick.

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Originally posted by dj_nocturne Thank you mystery for your reply. Can I ask you in more detail what you mean by bassline? I've studied many trance songs and most of the time the bassline is just the same quarter note repeated over and over, one eighth offset from the kick.

you didn't study enough then.

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Originally posted by Octanesyco Greetings. My name is Casey. You can call me Moose. -Moose

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Originally posted by dj_nocturne Thank you mystery for your reply. Can I ask you in more detail what you mean by bassline? I've studied many trance songs and most of the time the bassline is just the same quarter note repeated over and over, one eighth offset from the kick.

The trouble is I cannot hear a bassline in your track at all, so either there isn't one or it's pushed so far back in the mix that it's not noticeable.

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