I'm currently listening to your track...
The main synth has too much reverb and the melody is withput any structure, imo.
You used nice fx-sounds and percussions except from the alert sound, it's not my taste...
All in all I noticed that the main theme is always repeated - try to make a real break with new built up.
Many different sounds are used so that the who track lacks structure...
The bassdrum is nice, btw^^

Greets
Lancaster

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thanks for the criticism! .
i am an amatuer so i dont get everything you say but from what i know the main synth is the way it is, imo i cant change the reverb.
i think you mean without? withput isnt really a word is it?
i can try toying with the main theme so it becomes more variation .
the alarm sound can be fixed it is just a marker, though im not good with snare's or hi-hat. the echo if you meant echo with reverb is easely fixed . ill try to come back with a new v. tomorrow if possible.

yet again thanks for your wiev.
the bassdrums are for kind of drums with different masterings etc to get the effect i want.

cmon people tell me about the flaw's in my song

i did some fast changes like turning down the echo and re-structuring lead 2 that comes in after break 2. so it has a synth "chord" now wich gives a little variation between the lead's.

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Last edited by Dj Cola on Oct-16-2005 at 13:35

1) Yes, I mean "without"
2) Well, echo is a general word - You've to make a difference between reverb and delay...
You call it reverb when the sound fades out and delay when it is repeated, dunno how to explain


Greetings
Lancaster

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i think the melody has some structure but the delay simply smooths that out. and well ill try to shorten the reverb a bit.
now i re-structured the song a bit, took away some (i think its one) fx's and gave the whole song more structure.

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Good base for this track with good kick and a pumping bass line.

The rest of the track leaves me scratching my head a little as to where it's going.
The melody still lacks any clear direction and if you were thinking in terms of apealling to others this is one of the fundamentals that you have to get correct as in most cases this is what people will use to remember your track by.
It actually sounds more like a solo than anything else. Whilst it's not offensive and it seems in key.

But keep at it as there are good things too. It takes time to learn to write but it will come.

Cheers
Nem

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thanks for the critique.

how do i give the melody a direction?

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no, but seriously, they feel good