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Dark kick, bubbly bass, not that interesting.. try adding more low end eq at 43-47 hz to fatten it up.

Ok, I fastforwarded in this track to the middle where things were a lot more interesting..

Ok.. you're making things interesting at 2:20 with the sounds you have there.

The wavy string would sound better without the vibrato.

Try some other bassline, this one doesn't do the track justice, cause you have some really good ideas in this one and I think you can make is a lot better by improving the intro and their sounds.

Good break with melody, very nice blips.
Kicks off at 5:51

Change the sounds and you've got a good track here!
Anyway, see what others think of this one as well..

Keep working on it! I'll give it a listen again when you're finished, just send me a PM

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i listened, thought the intro was minimal and good. i dont think the kick rolls are good but thats just a prefference- sounds good in the main lead build before 6min mark. building and building sounds good so far. Lead is nice and most of the instrumentation is great, but something sounds distorting when the main lead is on with the kick.... i think its the destorting sounding bassline...
Overall great track.

Cheers guys!

As I said this is just a demo version, just wanted to throw it togethr quickly to see what it would sound like. More comments welcome!

Nobody else?!