hey all,

got a new track up, thanks to Darksword for the help

www.soundclick.com/transcendentalparadigm


comments welcome!

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no comments? i considered this my best work yet

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like the atmospheric intro, you have a nice angelic voice going on there.

dont like the bass, just lacks style. a bit housy imo. the melody is nice although with that bass it doesnt work. definately lose the bass.

breakdown doesnt seem to fit with the track. you began angelic then went dark jsut seems out of place. i think you should work from the intro as guidance get a warm bass and build the track on the dreamy atmosphere.

hope im not too critical mate.

keep it up!

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yea i noticed that too myself after listening to it a few times on repeat... its cause i have those real dark and moody strings in the background at the break.. and then after the break it becomes light and airy again lol.. i dunno... i guess its kinda like a journey sort of start off nice and light then u enter the dark realm of the ethereal then at the end you are coming back to light lol, i dont know. yea that bass is kinda housy now that you mention it.

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woot my song is shooting up the charts over @ soundclick... i wish there was a way for non members to vote over there, because its hard to tell what people think other than that they are just listening to the track

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is this fl studio? just curious.

nice groove. very nice light ambient trance.

getting a little monotonous at 1:32 maybe breakbeat a little

the perc is real weak and the bass is dull too. suffers from some low presence. maybe some classic synth sound fonts would be cool.

composition style is smooth. i like the energy build right before 3:00. hearing the arp back at 3:30 is off, maybe take the motif to a whole new voice and change orchestration.

nice tune. polish it up, it's a good starting place for sure.

yea its fl studio .. but none of the sounds are from FL... with the exception of the hats which are from the fruity drums live... everything else is z3ta, vanguard, legacy cell

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I like the sound at aroun 0:49.

However, your kick is inaudible at that point. It needs to be EQ'd, Compressed, and given a bit more presence.

Wow, 2:20 is a real trip.

Melody is kind of wandering, and doesn't really make sense until the pads come in.

Ending was a little abrupt.

This one's still got a long way to go. Your sounds are interfering with each other all over, and the composition could do with some work as well. Use EQ's and compressors to help you with the first part, and listen to other trance for ideas on composition, but don't base your entire compositional paradigm on one or two songs; experiment a bit.

Good luck.

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