at 2:35 i'd bring in a copy of the lead, panned right, which will fill out the track as the lead seems to be panned hard left at the moment

at 3:20, instead of the break bit, I'dd bring it in hard, with a stunted drum roll, use the breaks bit as a second (shorter) break a little later on.

takes way too long to come back in hard.

all the elements are there it's just structurally messed up.

in the section at 4:20 the sounds, kick and bassline are far too weak, you need to spend some time producing this.

this track is going to be cool - it juts needs you to sit and produce it for a while.

it goes all messy at 4:20 onwards.

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Listening:

Nice kick.

Nice sounds,need more energy on the intro build up maybe?

nice begining on the lead, but wait.. where is that fat supersaw i was expecting?:P

The break doesnt work for me

Ahh there it was, the supersaw (Ad some delay and stereo expansion on that

Damn that wasnt much of that

Like the main electric,guita, like synth , but i want more wormth, layer some leads?

Overall, a really desent track, but it needs some work, but i like the melody and the idea of the track!

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Spacy atmosphere, nice melody. I like it but I agree with the others, it needs more work to clear up the sound. It will be really good! Keep it up!

Akia

Bad sounds, decent melody but nothing nice. In fact i kinda hated it... But i didnt listen it loud

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Last edited by shpanda on Jul-05-2006 at 22:13

Bassline is kinda nonexistant. Do more for it. The kick is pretty strong imo. I'm expect a nice epic breakdown now with this atmosphere.

The lead sounds panned to the left pretty hard. Maybe a harder synth on the right side with the same melody would do something cool for stereo expansion. Not a fan of that break. Doesn't fit well especially since it just jumps into this odd little breakbeat breakdown.

New lead synth? Not a fan of it alone. Maybe pan that to the right and have the other on the left. The guitar sounds pretty cool I suppose. The main climax is a little long and repetitive with no new elements. Overall, decent track that could use some work. If have the ideas like someone else said, just need some more detailed production fixings.