Love the driving feel to this. Great drum loop.

Excellent up to 1:52 - track loses its punch a bit. I know what you're trying to achieve by slowly breaking it down but I'd maybe throw a pad in the back there or something or some other subtle sound.

Once it's broken down it's pretty much the same thing repeated. Again I'd throw in a new melody or something but I suppose thats the whole progressive feel.

Track is too short!! Defo on the right track but I think it could go further. Mixing levels etc are perfect.

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love the squeeky sound but its not really fitting in at all. im sure you like it, and it is unique but in my opinion it just doenst work. at the breakdown instead of gradually reducing elements maybe you could drop out all the stuff and crash in to the break down. dont bring the kick and perc loop back in until after the build up is over though. as of now the breakdown is reall down... its like a break middle. break it down some more and build it up some more and this track is gonna be golden! im really loving this song though man. your an awosme producer. mixing is amazingly well done. id say just work on your arrangement. some of your chord changes were a bit awkward. you really dont need as many chord changes as you did in the song. keep it simple and keep up the good work. your synth sounds are sweet as hell. using vst's or hardware? which synths. i pmed you a link to my latest track.

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i love the bassline so fat.. its a bit short but im sure its work in progress. good luck with it wouldnt mind hearing the finished copy

Okay, full feedback. Levels are good. Concept is good. I like the direction of where you are going with this. But, I think you need some more percussion unless you are going for an ambient track. Something to produce more energy. Like someone mentioned before, the squeaky sound doesn't quite fit in the track. I wasn't really 'captured' by the track, although your bassline is decent. You have the workings of a great track, but you gotta really get into the structure. I've studied musically theory and structure for many years. Work on the phasing of your project. Get your phases in line with a good structure that will make your track 'DJ Friendly'. Don't hate me for writing all this, as I am the hardest critic of myself. I always provide constructive criticism, because honestly...you'll benefit more from this, than from everyone saying it's good. you'll thank me later. Keep up the good work. Don't rush your release...fine tune...get opinions from both the average listener, and listeners like me. You'll get this together soon...and you'll be really proud when you know that your track is finally finished...the right way. Best of luck man. Take care.

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Listening to this again. Man it's really got potential. Synth work and the automation is awesome. I realised what it is about 1:52. I think its the change of note while losing some of the punch when you drop the percs. I'd stick in the same key.

But I think you need to lengthen the first break. Bring all the things you're doing in the later breaks to that the first break and drop in the main hook again.

Really love the drum loop from the start and the first chord progressions are excellent.

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This definitely has some potential!!! Great job! I feel as though you need a main lead.

Just to make sure I'm hearing things right, are you using sidechain compression with your kick as a source and your pad as the output? I just want to make sure I'm hearing it right. It sounds great!

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thanks for all the great feedback everyone, i'm glad some of you are enjoying it. I'm gonna take this track all the way home with some additional percussion, and a fresh approach to the arrangement. Possibly even add a lead. Also, in response to your question it's a drum sample for the sidechain with the pitch and tone modulated a bit, the bassline and pad are on the same sidechain. I took out the squeak FX and played with the arrangement, you can hear that here: http://lego.zianet.com/tilda140/prototype.mp3


anyone else?

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I think you played with the arrangement way too much. I thought the arrangement was fine up to about 1:42 when it started to break down. Now it seems to be stop/start too much in the beginning.

Also there is something strange happening with the percs loop now. It sounds like a small glitch somewhere in there. And did you change the sound on the main lead? It sounds different until :46 when it's back to the original track I thought was so good!!

Ah I see if you have changed the main break at about 2:18. Sounding better but I think you could improve it more with a high filter before it kicks in. You could really tease your audience.

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I have the original project file of the version you heard all intact, I save a new version for any changes I make. And you're right, the track is very delicate as far as the tweaking goes... I'll probably open up the original project and see if I can hear the difference. The lead didn't change but I play with the reverb more in this one... diffusion, wetness, etc.

Love the bass synths. There's great potential with this.
Imo, it needs more drive, a more defined lead melody and a phatter low end. I actually got a little insipred and made this little sample.
I hope you don't mind.

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It might not the style you intended, but that's what popped into my head when I listened to it.

I am gathering feed back from my friends at various record labels, DJ/producer friends of mine, because they know I'm getting to the point where a release is inevitable. Once I finish this track, I would like you to remix if it you want. I can't really garuntee any releases or anything, but I'd be willing to hear what you can do. This track should be done very soon.

but I do like that style! Cool stuff!!