My honest opinion,

The bassline sounds cheap, not warm at all, it gives the first impression that you hurry the tracks instead of polish them like the babies they should be for you.

The track itself is really empty, I just listened to it for one minute and I hit the x button of your web page, that , you don't want, you wanna keep your potential fans interested, and you can do it in many ways, composing a nice intro, working in the kick drums, building a warm and catchy bassline, and all of that you need to do to your track.

Don't give up, just work on it fella!

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Der Mystik's Music

Ok, I think you need to work on some important parts of music production. You need to work on changing the volume throughout the song so that sounds gradually come in. You should avoid using premade sound fx to transition in your songs. You also need to learn how to use effects on your synths. I am curious as to what program you are using. If you are using Fruity Loops, I will be happy to help you out.

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As said above, the bass isn't warm, and it's that old kick-bass-kick-bass-style bassline. I think you should change it to something more driving...like in Carl B - All Day..just play around with the notes and I'm sure you'll come up with something good, deep and warm.
Another thing is the percussions; You don't have any percussions (at least I can't hear any) except for the hat + clap. Add more (and again, I recommend you to check out All Day, and maybe Rusch and Elusive's remix of Rendezvous by Salt Lake too).
Another thingy is that kinda-strange-"water"-fx, which is way too repetitive. Try to use more fxs (create, or d/l samples)...
Hmm best tip I can give you right now is to keep working, and hard (I can give you my example..I've tried to produce for about 2 years until I made my first decent original track).

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Last edited by ronk on Mar-21-2005 at 16:43