This is cheesy yes, but considering the booring as batshit prog that seems to be infecting every form of trance these days, if I heard a melody as brutally honest as that on a dancefloor, I think I would cry and probably go off.

Definately try to tone down the cheese factor. Make the snare and percs less squeaky clean and darken up the lead just a tad.

Give it a bit more sincerity... lush pads in the background maybe tend to work.

Also, its lacking resolution. Cheesy melodies like that need to lead somewhere thats beautiful and original and not be the entire focus of a track imho. Cheese means overused and cliche, if you can prove that melody isnt the entire focus, then you can probably get away with it.

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i liked it...

Thank you all for you statements...

@Axolotyl: As I said, it's just a sample and I always begin my work with the main melody... I didn't supsect, that the melody is "cheesy"

Apart from that, I reworked the melody a bit, but I've kept up the style.
Thanks for the advises concerning the percs and especialy the pad^^

@Kid_presentable: Reassuring to know that not everybody would "cry andprobably go off"

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Originally posted by Lancaster @Kid_presentable: Reassuring to know that not everybody would "cry andprobably go off"

No, I meant cry in a good way. OK, bad choice of words.

Good melody, not enough edge, nuff said.

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I understood you in a complete different way... these are the results of my bad marks in english lessons

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