The idea behind the song is good, but you have to be carefull of the arrangement. It's a good idea to lead the listener through a song, similar to telling a story. To me it seems that you still have to work on the organization of the song.
Also, some elements at the beggining of the mix are too loud (a synth that comes in after the intro). The relationship between individual elements is central to a good song.
On the hand, I like the drive in this production and the choice of sounds.
Keep up the good work
Lalin

the melody is great, the sounds of the synths and drums too. like ilalin said, there's a loss of 'balance' in the tune. like in levels and in even dynamics. needs some equilibrium. other than that, this track is magnificent! I'm really enjoying it. killer synths
good job baby

thanks for comments! I do need to work on arrangement and overall mixing it together. glad you like the melody. at least I know now its worth to continue with that one. Hope to update soon..work in progress.



regards
re808