does this melody sound cheesy? i cant decide!

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Hey not bad. I dont really like the bass, maybe thats why it sounds like cheese. I would go for a lower bass and cut the high end. If you have fl6 I would gladly help you out =]

i dont use fruity i use cubase. see there are two basses but the sub bass isnt coming through for some reason. ive put lowpass filters and eq'ed it and it still wont sit in the mix.

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I'm no expert by any means, but I'm really struggling trying to find structure in the melody here. I think there could be more transitions in the progression - as in there needs to be more. It felt like it was stuck a bit at times.

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its not the main melody just the build up before the breakdown.

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Originally posted by dj_kane its not the main melody just the build up before the breakdown.

Ah, ok..cool... I guess I would have to hear more then...

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theres something in there sounds cheesy and its driving me mad. ill post up a bigger sample see if any of you can spot it.

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Frequency

this is from about 30 seconds in.

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i think its cheezy lol x]

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it might be your percussion...it can get better. try experiment with that.

i also noticed an off-beat bassline in there. that might be a part of that cheeziness of which you think the track has. try mess around with different sequences for the bassline. or make a whole new one instead

hmm... i'll try to give some gap in between the long tail effects there (and they're easily identified, vengeance samples). not sure about cheesy here but i like the bass.

just deleted the melody and changed the mid bass to a simple rolling bassline. it was annoying me too much.

thanks though!

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