Didn't really get an overly Doorn-ish feel about this one but it did actually remind me of Breakfast! The snares and sine bass are cool, the way they interact with the kick kinda gives an illusion of a breakbeat - I would add some more cymbal & clappy percussion to drive it along even more though. This drive along with some sharp analog noises and some widened pads for ambience will complement the track beautifully! The main synth is kinda oldskool and is cool in a nostalgic way but I'd suggest replace it with something more modern (thicker and with some slight detune/distortion?) cos it doesn't fit the dark vibe that the track sets up in the beginning. Keep at it, will be interesting to see where this one goes!

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How long you are making music ? (i want to know before i say any words about track).

~9 months overall. ~4 months where I put in a serious effort and had a lot more knowledge under my belt.

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Well nice man, i like the track you got pretty nice skills with the beats kick and fast movements at nice level. Nice work like for 9 months you should keep working as much as your ears can take
You can check my production too : http://www.tranceaddict.com/forums/...3&forumid=74&s=

What does how long I have been producing have to do with your opinion/criticisms?

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Yeah less you work and better effects the more talent you got
I think your tune is pretty nice that way.
But offcourse i dont judge time/quality of music as it's nonsens.