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Aural Eclipse - Don't Lose Your Bottle (Deprivation Remix)
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| DJRavemonkey |
Right heres a new production by myself and the first one i've done that im almost happy with. Luke & I combined to create the melody but the rest is all my work. All comments are welcome, tho i would appriciate some criticism so i can know where im goin wrong.
http://www.uppych.freeserve.co.uk/A...on%20Remix).mp3
enjoy :D |
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| goldenarmZ |
i love this track :) the melody and synth work is brilliant.. and the breakdown is awesome :D
i think it needs a bit more percussion to keep the track moving, but on the whole it rules.
we'll see how my remix turns out ;) |
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| Mr.Mystery |
| quote: | Originally posted by goldenarmZ
i think it needs a bit more percussion to keep the track moving, but on the whole it rules.
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Agreed... needs a bassline too - the current one is barely hearable.
Nice work, though. |
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| Project T |
you know wot i think and i can't be arsed 2 write it out :p
oh yea mike, u know when fruity lost that zip when i was round yours, where the did u find it coz its just lost all my remix of ligaya lol |
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| S2K |
Very nice work overall.
I got a bit frustrated at the start though, I kept wanting some sort of bass line or bass pattern to kick in earlier.. Good work though :) |
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| goldenarmZ |
yea its got a really nice vibe, very unique!
as fray said, a lil more perc here n there.. and av a bash at shotening it a lil.. theres 1 or 2 places where it goes on for a few too many bars :)
quality stuff.. shall also see what my remix has to say hehe :) |
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| goldenarmZ |
| quote: | Originally posted by goldenarmZ
yea its got a really nice vibe, very unique!
as fray said, a lil more perc here n there.. and av a bash at shotening it a lil.. theres 1 or 2 places where it goes on for a few too many bars :)
quality stuff.. shall also see what my remix has to say hehe :) |
that was me, tu_face..
oops forgot fray was logged in :p |
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| DJRavemonkey |
thanx for the feedback so far people. Taken it into account and just shortened the intro by 4 bars and move the bass down an octave and made it slightly louder.
Will have to work on sorting the percussion when i get time. |
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| Lightworks |
hey mate!
im' not really too fond of it as it is now i'm afraid... it sounds very strange without a decent bassline. i don' think you should lower it one octave though, just crank up its volume or compression.
the high pitched sounds need more interest, i'd lower them an octave instead. they sound very squeeky with that detuning on it... no my taste sorry ;)
keep working on it i'd say, it's got some nice melodies in it ;)
take care,
LW |
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| DJRavemonkey |
| quote: | Originally posted by Lightworks
hey mate!
im' not really too fond of it as it is now i'm afraid... it sounds very strange without a decent bassline. i don' think you should lower it one octave though, just crank up its volume or compression.
the high pitched sounds need more interest, i'd lower them an octave instead. they sound very squeeky with that detuning on it... no my taste sorry ;)
keep working on it i'd say, it's got some nice melodies in it ;)
take care,
LW |
i havent lowered it all one octave, just one part of it and have turned up another part of it. when you the high pitched sounds i guess you mean the highest melody that kicks back in after the break, if so then i've tried taking that down an octave and it sounds much worse and has no real effect. Which is why it is as high as it is. instead of bring it down, i've turn down the treble on it a little to stop the squeaky sound of it.
Thanx for the comments tho wim its all good :D |
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| MaRt |
I like this! It could potentially be better if you gave it some more progression, if you know what I mean - it dragged a bit in some places, but that could easily be fixed if you brought in extra percussion, shortened some bits and added some subtle pads. I'm going to oppose the majority and say the bass is actually OK, though perhaps you could try adding a second bassline to support it and build up a thicker texture.
These are just some suggestions that probably don't make sense...but you asked :D |
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| X-Hale |
I like it overall.
Like the others have said...it lacks a good bassline, the track over all is a bit 'inkyplinkyplonky' lol its not particularly flowing.
The main synths are great! you ahve some really nice sounds there.
Its not your regular trance track which is what I like about it most, the melody is really nice and jolly.
I think its brilliant as a 1st version but truley I think theres quite a bit to be done on the track.
The leads are a little high too ;) |
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