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please review this melody
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| red eyed phil |
its a simple melody done in FL. its 2.57mb and just under 3 minutes.
please tell me what you think! Thank you!
download here |
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| Bren-F |
hmm... I'm not sure what U were trying to achieve here.
The beginning percussion sounded ok but then the melody came in.
its to weird for me,
Sorry :nervous: |
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| S2K |
I'll be frank, it's awful. Sorry. You need to have more structure in your melodies, and they need to progress smoothly through different chord patterns. Yours sounds like random notes.
Hope this helps. |
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| JMF [TrAcId] |
it's too fast - and there are kinda too many notes going on :eyespop:
made me feel a bit funny listening to it - sorry |
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| red eyed phil |
| its really my first attempt at a melody and i suck. thanks for being frank and opinionated, thats what i want, no need to be sorry- i thought it was pretty good:nervous::eyes: i wont post any more crap like this for a long time, i promise =p |
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| nic01445 |
| hmm...well, at least i can say that most of the notes in your lead are in the same key, except in the end. Yeah, keep at it man. I like the effect in the begining! |
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| DJMikeyP |
Hey man - Don't worry - it may be bad now but you'll get better.
I'd say immediate advice - it sounds just like you were trying to do one of those melodies thats hidden inside a line that moves every 16th note.... What you have to do first, is do that simple melody FIRST, like where theres maybe 2-4 16th's between each note - the kind of melody you'd hear in rock or something.... THEN, after you have a simple melody you like, you fill in all the holes with the root note of the chord you're currently working in....THen you can get adventurous and like if theres 2 holes that you both filled in with the root, make the second one the next note in the scale.
Also add some reverb and 2 step delay to the leads maybe. Hey I'm interested in conveying the moving line concept to you - let me know if you want help.
MIke |
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| S2K |
| I'd like to add also: this was very similar to the sorta stuff I was first producing 3 years ago.. check out some my productions in this forum... you can see how I've improved... so do not give up. ;) |
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| red eyed phil |
| quote: | Originally posted by DJMikeyP
Hey man - Don't worry - it may be bad now but you'll get better.
I'd say immediate advice - it sounds just like you were trying to do one of those melodies thats hidden inside a line that moves every 16th note.... What you have to do first, is do that simple melody FIRST, like where theres maybe 2-4 16th's between each note - the kind of melody you'd hear in rock or something.... THEN, after you have a simple melody you like, you fill in all the holes with the root note of the chord you're currently working in....THen you can get adventurous and like if theres 2 holes that you both filled in with the root, make the second one the next note in the scale.
Also add some reverb and 2 step delay to the leads maybe. Hey I'm interested in conveying the moving line concept to you - let me know if you want help.
MIke |
yes i was. i tried to do a melody like the "NewStuff" file in the FLP loop files folder(if you look at its melody you'll know what i tried to do). Thanks for the help! i'd really appreciate it if you have any more advice to give. =)
anyone whos interested heres the original melody (before i massacred it), only 25seconds.=) |
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