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I need your thoughts on my track PLEASE!! :)
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| dj dave b |
ok so it's not a track as such but it's a cut, I did it a little while ago and i like it.. everything is completly original and stuff
note: i am 17 and have been composing for about a year.
download here! http://smellybin.com/smp/daveb-demo1.mp3
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| Eugene |
Well, it certainly sounds very professional.
Can I ask what equipment you're using?
I wouldn't be able to tell that it was recorded by an amateur, so the quality is pretty good.
Now, about the melody... my advice is to make it a little more memorable, because as it is right now it just doesn't go anywhere... you know? Make the chord progression a little more captivating and memorable. Maybe that means making it more predictable -- but in this case I think it would only help, strangely enough.
Well, that's my opinion. |
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| dj dave b |
yes i definetly understand what your talking about there
i used fruityloops.. i found with some tweaking you can make it sound quite good (tweaking as in filters, quality samples etc)
I have been working on another tune, im still working on the main synth sound so for the moment it still sounds a bit edgy
again this is not the full song for obvious reasons.
check it out http://smellybin.com/smp/daveb-demo2.mp3
p.s ty for the reply! :D |
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| Eugene |
Yeah, I know what you mean.
I used to play with FruityLoops myself but then I gave up. For some reason I was overwhelmed by the number of options and filters available, and I couldn't use them the right way to make a good song. Plus the sound was very amateurish -- especially the snare, I couldn't find a professional-sounding snare instrument!
Well, I'll listen to your second demo and get back to you with comments tomorrow. |
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| dj dave b |
yes the snare fully sucks doesnt it.. lol
90% of the samples that come with it suck.
Okay Great, and what a prompt reply! |
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| DjMT |
D,
Sound and sample quality are good!
bass and percussion are good as well.
like the intro...maybe just a bit longer (the DJ in me!)...not sure I could listen to this track for an extended period of time, as far as the "flow" of things...starts to sound a bit repetitive...maybe something more in the way of transitions and some variety in the synth...I'm not a big music critic, just trying to tell you what I think...hope it helps! |
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| dj dave b |
Critisism is a good thing!
I made that a while ago and I liked the sound of the cut so I thought i'd post it here. I think my layout has improved somewhat since then, ty for your thoughts :).
Take a listen to my newest sample if you can (im still working on the main synth's sound)
http://smellybin.com/smp/daveb-demo2.mp3
tell me what you think :) |
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| Gloomy |
sample 1: sounds cool, but like Djmt said: use a larger intro, and maybe try to stay a bit in the same pattern. It's good trying to be original, but don't exagerate. It starts rather dark, but suddenly you change to a more happy tune, which doesn't go well with the first part. Maybe try to continue working in the same tune.
sample 2: nothing wrong to say about, soudns very good, really. If you continue it like it starts, it will be a great demo. |
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| dj_alfi |
| hey a fruitylooper.... im d/l the sample now.. so ill be getting back to ya soon....:) |
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| dj_alfi |
| good track... do u wanna do a project? send me the flp file (use the pm button) or mail me it @: [email protected]... i have been producing songs for the last 5 years now (im 16) so i kinda know what im doing, and this song could turn out real great...:D |
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| dj dave b |
cool. that would be great :D
at the moment im lacking mostly in the main synth sound (in terms of quality), I just can't get it sounding good enough with fruityloops.
Give me a bit to get the tune sorted out and i'll send it too you
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| dj_alfi |
| okey dokey smokey:p |
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