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h.m.b. - caramel (new song)
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| hadi burpee |
hey people
i have made a new song, this is only version 1 as i want to add more stuff, but i wanted to get some feedback from you guys, so anything would be greatly appreciated
6:46, 128kbit 6.19mb
h.m.b. - caramel
thnx elena for the name |
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| starglider |
| I like this, sorta hypnotic feel to it. However I think it gets a tad repetitive in the second half. There's a lot of promise in the first half but then after the break it doesn't really go anywhere. A bit of variation might go along way. I do like your sound though, it's great considering you haven't been producing for that long. |
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| Fundamental |
Agree with what starglider has said. In addition I think the reverse cymbals are a but harsh sounding in comparison to the rest of the soft track. Maybe quieten them a little or add some reverb or something?
Everything else sounded pretty sweet though. :D Just gotta progress the latter part of the track a bit further... |
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| sot |
| i def agree, this is a bit boring, doesent exactly get anywhere. I suggest maybe adding a pad or something melodic to it in addition to those bleep noises. |
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| elena |
hadi babe,
hahaha was so glad to read yer email, "youll die when you hear"
for feedback, i thought this was more appropiate.
well like the other two said, the second half tends to get a little repetetive. for instance, when i start the song, until the part you had already made when you showed me a few days ago, im completely focused and enjoying it immensely. however, towards the other half, i jsut let the music run and dont have to pay much attention cause it just keeps on going without any of that interesting oomphness from the first half.
i know you told me that it requires more polishing but i think youre on the right path. i think it could use like a bridge type of thing (not too familiar with proper terminology) that just captivates the listener once and for all. well maybe not a bridge but a little bit of somthing in the middle-end that just drastically changes. |
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| hadi burpee |
| thanks for the honest feedback people. even though its kinda like "ouch, they are ripping my song" its better, so i can go make it better with those suggestions. thanks =), anyone else? =) |
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| rb2k1 |
yo buddy.. you are improving with everything new i hear from you! your style so reminds me of a SASHA in the making.
keep it up bro.
~RossB |
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| Rakoon |
| Yeah I agree with elena. Gets too repetitive. You gotta always keep it fresh and interesting. I'd also recommend adding some more layers and percussion. Make it sound fuller. Otherwise good job :toocool: |
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