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Armana - Ethereal - ABOVE & BEYOND MEETS ALPHAZONE (pg. 2)
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| Stories |
| The main melody has definite potential. But it sounds like it's a bit off in terms of key... something just doesn't click as well as it should. But I must say that weird under melody thing that happens in the buildup at like 45sec or so is horrid (the same one that happens right before the second break). I feel like the type of melody and progression of it needs a harder bass punch... it sounds relatively flat compared to the rest of the track. |
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| alanzo |
| quote: | | Originally posted by Subtle yeah, excactly ;) |
thanks for the great tip! i'll try that in my next one..
| quote: | Originally posted by Stories
The main melody has definite potential. But it sounds like it's a bit off in terms of key... ...it sounds relatively flat compared to the rest of the track. |
the entire track is in the key of Eb Minor.. I used a I-VI-VII chord progression... everything is in tune.. listen again :D
thanks for the comments.. more are welcome :) |
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| extalin |
this is very energetic :). reminds me of like aura / trance control
it reminds me of stuff i was listening to when i first got into trance, but that's not a bad thing.
have you tried making any chilled out darker tracks?
i have a feeling you would do a good track like that too. |
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| soundrush |
okok, heres my little rewiev.
don't like the bassline that much (needs more lower frequencies i guess). the fx are cool (maybe you could make give them some more edge instead of the liquid sound). the drums are ok, too (maybe some bongos or rims benaeth the standart percusions to fill it up). i totaly agree with en2t on the sound that comes in at 0.40 but i appreciate that you did something unique. i realy enjoyed the part where the main-lead gets filtered in. the melody sounds good to me. like this acidisch sound in the background of the melody. what i was missing during the whole song was some pads or strings and the buildup could be a bit better, some of the transitions are abit ugly (e.g. when the melody comes in)
though, a good production with some weaknesses. i give you 7/10 points.
cheers, niklas. |
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| DJFreaq |
damn... i'm embarassed. you did a great job i think, at least it's amazing compared to mine. real clean i thought overall, melody is nice too...
i'll just stick to mixing
if you want to feel better about yourself just download mine
and by the way, why is this section called amature? shouldn't there be another one called... truley amature, but i doubt people would even look at that forum... |
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| DjAviander |
| quote: | Originally posted by DJFreaq
damn... i'm embarassed. you did a great job i think, at least it's amazing compared to mine. real clean i thought overall, melody is nice too...
i'll just stick to mixing
if you want to feel better about yourself just download mine
and by the way, why is this section called amature? shouldn't there be another one called... truley amature, but i doubt people would even look at that forum... |
Sounds like someones had a bad day?
Really dude, this ch00n is really nice =)..
I like the melody ALOT. But the bassdrum needs work, some lower frequences like one said before me =)..
Its energetic and driving throughout the whole ch00n, i like that..
And the breakdown around 4:10 something is nice =)
Ill give it a 7,5/10 |
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| Jay M |
Hi,
This tune starts pretty nice, but at 0:34 it's getting a bit too messy and loud IMO. The hihats are a bit too present. The clap is ugly. That pulsy counter melody is pretty cool, but too loud. At the break the melody is just too loud, and that too low piano playing along makes it muddier, I think you should change (remove) that. Mastering could be better as well, it's as if you still have too many low end to your synths, dunno, could be clearer.
I don't want to tear it all apart. The melody is quite cool, and the track has a good drive with lots of energy. Kick sample does a good job as well. Just many tiny things I would change at first. :D
Hope this helps :D
-Jay |
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| alanzo |
thanks for the comments everyone! Sorry for the late response.. I was at NYC for the weekend :)
| quote: | Originally posted by extalin
it reminds me of stuff i was listening to when i first got into trance, but that's not a bad thing.
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yeh as hard as I try I still tend to produce tracks that sound like what I was listening to when I First got into trance as well.. A few people have told me to be more creative with playing around with the melodies and crap instead of just bringing it right in..
| quote: | Originally posted by soundrush
the drums are ok, too (maybe some bongos or rims benaeth the standart percusions to fill it up. what i was missing during the whole song was some pads or strings and the buildup could be a bit better, some of the transitions are abit ugly (e.g. when the melody comes in)
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I realized that the percussion in this track was just a one-shot deal.. it could of just been a loop throughout the entire track.. will put some more complex fills and crap into the next one
there was a light pad there but I guess it wasn't full/loud enough to fill up the breakdown..
| quote: | Originally posted by DJFreaq
if you want to feel better about yourself just download mine |
I left some feedback for your track ;)
| quote: | Originally posted by JayM
Mastering could be better as well, it's as if you still have too many low end to your synths, dunno, could be clearer.
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I try to pride myself on my ability to master reasonably well :) is that the only part of the mastering you thought could of used a change?
again, thanks for the comments everyone! MORE ARE WELCOME :) |
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| Sirocco |
| quote: | Originally posted by alanzo
I try to pride myself on my ability to master reasonably well :) is that the only part of the mastering you thought could of used a change?
again, thanks for the comments everyone! MORE ARE WELCOME :) |
work on it some more dude i cant really heard much after 2:27 but before that its mint |
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| alanzo |
| quote: | Originally posted by Sirocco
work on it some more dude i cant really heard much after 2:27 but before that its mint |
what do you mean? you can't hear the bass or something? |
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| djdustx |
Hey Alanzo
Wasup up bro
My comments?...i would have to say this is a pretty amazin tune man...i would have to say im glad theres people like u as well as myself so far who want to go on a different trance spin
love everybit of it...but what kinda ruined it for me was the wierd line at 1:56...i was like Yea until i heard this...and then when it morphed into a better sound i was like YEA again...but then when it turned back into that sound i was like NO!! lol:stongue:
Well to be on honest this is going on my mix cd as well as SoundRush's track (amazing track if no one heard it yet)
Keep up the good work man
Sebastiano :nervous:
New Alanzo supporter ;) |
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| Sirocco |
| quote: | Originally posted by alanzo
what do you mean? you can't hear the bass or something? |
i can hear the bass but everthing get into a huge blur. i hear a booomy sounds and some highs going buy but everythng isnt ndependant |
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