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[trance]full track - dunno what to call it yet =) would love criticism
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| optik |
hi everybody, the sample I posted before is finished now, thanks for all the great comments about it =)
gunna think of a name when I think of the lyrics ;)
this will be the instrumental version - although I'm thinking about changing the lead completely, as it may be a little old school (as some of my respected producers have affirmed to me =) - tell us what you think
I'm working on a version with vocals, which I'll post as soon as it's done, but in the mean time, be as critical as you like, cause it needs tweaks:
http://optik.real-t.co.uk/optik_wia...rvocalpromo.mp3
many thanks in advance
optik |
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| Trancefered |
Nice intro... Like the buildup.
The synth/bass that came in at 0:54 should be beefed up a bit
Like the breakdown at 2:50: those pads sounds real good... Did you program those or you used a sample?
That synth at 3:26 is building the heat up good...
and...
hmmmm... lacks a bit of drama... No splashs, no crash at 3:50... I was waiting for something harder...
Nice, I like that part 4:32... Now that's what I was waiting for!
Change at 5:00 is really drastic but don't ask me why; it really fits good in there! But I coulda used more of that melody... Maybe make it going on for another 8 bars?
Good outro.
Really nice job overall.
Peace bro (I'm saving that one on my harddisk ;))
Trancefered (a.K.a J Logic) |
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| optik |
cheers matey - tis all programmed, no samples (well, the percs and drums are layered 1 shots...)
in the vocal version, the vocal comes in at 2:45 - but I really should do something else with that section, as this will be an instrumental version
vocals will be through to about 3:20 in the final
appreciate you time sir =)
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| Sunquest |
hmm
call it garbage :whip: :whip:
hehe just kidding :toothless
ur mastering is excellent as usuall, even for 112 rip hehe
build up is great, now the climax i hear u add another synth, u should definatly add that synth in the first 2 minutes building up, because its not good when it comes by surprise, but ur melody is good, very catchy :)
hope the vocals work out,
peace out |
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| BuRoLovesTrance |
| Hey man...I like this a lot....very good quality, perfect synths, good fx and very good melody. Keep doing this amazing work up. ;) |
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| optik |
cheers Sunquest and BuRoLovesTrance =)
much appreciated =)
this has had about 35 downloads from here, please just tell us what you think if you listen to it ;) - comments really help, even if they are small ones - so if you don't like the kick, please tell me, I won't be offended =)
cheers
op |
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| Jay M |
Got this already m8, usually I listen a few times before I review (if it's quality) ;)
At start, the kick is a bit confusing... but you just need to know how it flows.
That low square sound is a bit too simple i guess.
First coming lead is a nice one, my kind of sound. Could use a tad of verb to create a little room.
Percs have a nice swing, I like them. Uplifting tune so far.
Nice pads in the break. Ok lead is coming in now.
Very uplifting, i think it could use more phatness, like some phaser maybe, just to fancy it just a bit. and I'd give it a tad more high presence.
Energetic tune! Produced very well. Sounds a bit flat and rawish here and there... but i don't really mind. Good work!!
:)
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| optik |
cheers Jay =)
I think most of the points you made come down to the fact it's just a 112kbit (I think at least =)
I'll be working on the vocal over the next two days, so I should have a re-mastered version up with vocal shortly (but due to a little bit of RC interest, it may have to be a sample) - so I'll try some of the things you suggest =)
cheers for taking the time to listen and review =)
op |
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| alanzo |
this track has a real nice sound.. i dont like how simple it is in the beginning.. but the release is worth the simplicity of the intro..
what did u use for the main lead? |
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| moolow |
| I like it a lot! it sounds very clean.. Nice! :tongue2 |
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| optik |
thanks for listening moolow and alonzo;
the main lead is a JP8000 - which even though it's old gets a lot of use ;)
thanks for your time, I really appreciate it - especially considering this track has had well over 100 downloads now and I've got about 7 responses from here =)
cheers guys- pm me with anything you want reviewed |
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| Timothy |
| The main lead is really great :D |
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