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[melodic] jex - Beauty in Darkness
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| thoughtlessjex |
Not much to say about this track, really. The only weird thing is how hard it was for me to come up with a name. With most of my tracks, I'd play them back, and the name would just sort of pop into head. In this case, it took much more work.
As far as that goes, I am grateful to one particular friend of mine for acting as a sounding board as I tried to come up with a name.
And now, without further ado, Beauty in Darkness.
256 kbps
11:25
Feedback welcome. |
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| Jay M |
I'm at 7 mins now and it feels like taking for ever to get through this track! Jeez 4 minutes to go. This part is the peaceful part. First half was a bit dark. Now the buildup is there but it's a special one, you dont know what to expect to come next. That's not always bad, but I don't know if it's good in this one.
As for the sounds. The first synth sounds flat and simple. You could beef that one up, e.g. by giving it a more stereo feel. The kick is a booming one. I'd say cut some tail, it doesn't fit the peaceful part at all. Some piano notes are a bit off there. For the percussion, try to put some bongo or so here and there, more detail is needed. That higher arp is a bad choosen synth. Needs some delay and highcut, or less resonance.
There are some acid sounds in here which i like. It's good to see you put some work in making this one. You can hear a flow in the buildup, nexxt to the overall unexpectedness, you work towards breaks, which is good too. The music has some atmosphere to it as well.
Hope you find this ocmment useful. :)
-Jay |
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| JoeyEnv |
| quote: | Originally posted by Jay M
I'm at 7 mins now and it feels like taking for ever to get through this track! Jeez 4 minutes to go. This part is the peaceful part. First half was a bit dark. Now the buildup is there but it's a special one, you dont know what to expect to come next. That's not always bad, but I don't know if it's good in this one.
As for the sounds. The first synth sounds flat and simple. You could beef that one up, e.g. by giving it a more stereo feel. The kick is a booming one. I'd say cut some tail, it doesn't fit the peaceful part at all. Some piano notes are a bit off there. For the percussion, try to put some bongo or so here and there, more detail is needed. That higher arp is a bad choosen synth. Needs some delay and highcut, or less resonance.
There are some acid sounds in here which i like. It's good to see you put some work in making this one. You can hear a flow in the buildup, nexxt to the overall unexpectedness, you work towards breaks, which is good too. The music has some atmosphere to it as well.
Hope you find this ocmment useful. :)
-Jay |
^Amen. Couldn't of said it better myself. |
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| eulerfx |
- I like that note change at 1:14 and on
- A little repetitive until break at 2:30
- Have more punch to that bass-sweep-kick thing
- Some fx are kind of muddy, like distorted or something
- I like the bass that comes during break
- The strings/choirs at 3:30 sound relly nice as they come
- Finally, those lead notes change at 4:30 :)
- Nice buildup until the 5:00 break
- Seconds break gets melodic, sounds nice, but strings are a little muddy, need some bottom end.
- Kick kind of dies at 5:56 with all those melodies. Make it more prominent
- Nice gates at 6:20
- The whole melodic part needs a better mid and low frequency range, as it sounds a bit light
- Good chords at 7:50, but the effects are a bit overwhelming. Have something smoother in the background maybe...
- Also, the piano for the chords should be a bit quieter and lets tingy...are you using a SoundFont?
- I dont dig those high pitch synths at 8:58, they are kind of cheesy. |
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| thoughtlessjex |
| quote: | | I'm at 7 mins now and it feels like taking for ever to get through this track! Jeez 4 minutes to go. |
Heh. I'm not known for short tracks, if I'm known for anything at all.
| quote: | | Now the buildup is there but it's a special one, you dont know what to expect to come next. That's not always bad, but I don't know if it's good in this one. |
It was probably better in this case, since that's sort of the effect I was going for. The name Beauty in Darkness applies here, as well as on many other levels.
| quote: | | Some piano notes are a bit off there. |
What exactly do you mean by off? Off-key?
Thanks so far for everyone's comments. I'm seeing what I can do right now. |
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| Jake Conlon |
| you made this in fl studio, you can tell by the drums, change the samples and that wasp sounds cheap.:gsmile: |
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| david.michael |
Really good job with this piece.
Intro is WAY long though... several minutes into the song I was wondering if it was just an 11-minute techno song. Once the tranciness started though, I was all over it. ;)
I really like the piano in this. |
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| thoughtlessjex |
Okay, updated and pretty much finalized, as I can't think of any big fixes that need to be made now.
I ended up keeping the arping synth that everyone was complaining about since I liked it so much, although I added some overdrive to try to make it more interesting.
I also added a bongo track and put the percs through some more involved effects.
Thanks to those who reviewed it. |
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| cybernetica |
First of all, I love your style, and this track really rocks!
I personally have no problem with slow progressions, but it is really quite long, I think you could put it into a way shorter track.
Production-wise, this one is almost perfect imo.
The piano lead is cool, how did you do that?
I think in the end it gets a little bit disharmonic.
And as said, you can hear some synths are out of wasp. Since not everyone here has pro-equipment, its nothing to blame you for ;)
Anyway, well done :) |
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