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| razerscutpeople |
Darkness surrounds me i tremble with fear
I reach out to hold you but your nowere near
I whisper your name into the silent night
Tnd then i remember the awfull fight
The look on your face as you walked out the door
The sounds of my sobs as i fell to the floor
I wanted to kill you but i loved you to much
All i wanted was to once again feel your soft sweet touch |
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| razerscutpeople |
| post whether u like my poem or not!!! i want feedback!!!:nervous: |
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| DJ JEM |
| in the words of dj quicksilver " Let your mind be free " |
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| Dmatrox |
| this is a better poem than your last :D pretty good, but why didnt use post it in the chill out room. |
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| Aled_ |
Jesus...write a book, you're a genius.
:rolleyes: |
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| r5a |
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| 2fan |
| quote: | Originally posted by r5a
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Brilliiant :haha: :haha: :haha: |
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| monoxide |
| quote: | Originally posted by razerscutpeople
post whether u like my poem or not!!! i want feedback!!!:nervous: |
lie down on the couch and tell me:
-do you like to bang your head to the wall sometimes?
-do you think your sleeves are too long and can be tied behind your back?
-did you visit M.Jacksons ranch when you were a kid?
then i'll tell you your diagnosis. |
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| Halcyon+On+On |
| I thought it was pretty good. Sounds like song lyrics more than anything though - maybe you should write music? ;) |
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| razerscutpeople |
| thanx but i just wright poems in class. And yea i did go to the neverland ranch:haha: and to the people who said it sucked... YOU!!!!!!!!!!!!! |
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| Halcyon+On+On |
Oooh - there is much hate in you.
Turn that hate creative and you might have something sensational.
Then again, maybe you could just get a lot of money from that settlement with the whole Neverland Ranch thing. :haha: |
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| razerscutpeople |
mwahahahahahahahahaha good idea
:whip: :whip: (thats wut we did you know:whip: ) im scarred for life :nervous: |
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