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Ryan - It`s just For One Day (Original) My best track!!!!!
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| Rayan |
This is what I made on two days..
Tell me what I have to do better to the radio version of it. I know its long right now. And the mastering is not so good i think.
The Voices of me is not so good. (I want a girl to say what I say).
Me English Sucks!!!!! :D
BTW: I cant make it better right now. My computer is to damn SLOW!!! (ARghhh):whip: :whip:
I feel happy now when I`m done with the templet of it.
I do realy need FEEDBACK on this one!!!
So here is the link!!
http://www.lydparken.com/download/g....asp?fileid=514
Enjoy!! |
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| iloop |
ok, finaly after 3 tries it continues downloading all the way through.
I like the song, the bass line is sweet, great trance instrumentation and melodies. The vocals are fine but need to be turned down a bit and they seem to be a bit sharp in the high end...
The melodies seem really layed back for that bassline/percussions, maybe just me. there are nice builds but doesnt go anywhere super special- one of those melodies that sends shivers you know...
anyway, great production, keep up the great work. |
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| jrmacca |
i really enjoyed this!!
the guitar riff reminds me of a mellower version of voyage - yahel, yet it's still different. nothing wrong with the vocals, either :) good job! |
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| Rayan |
iloop: did you have problem downloading it?
okey. Thnaks. I will do something with the vocals!
jrmacca: wow! That is a good thing :D Thanks!! |
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| staticblue |
nice sounds in this one !!!
the guitar melody is funny :D nice pitching on the sound thou :)
when the beat comes back in, the track has quite a melancholic feeling, i liked that :)
i think this is my favorite work from you !
static blue |
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| Rayan |
wow! thanks jon (Staticblue). That was a very good ting to hear!
yea. you know me with the pitch. I`m crazy with it :P
Cheers!! |
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| Krogen |
Wow, wow. I know I'm just a noob who just joined but this thing is GREAT. It's probably the best trance track I heard THIS and LAST year, and I am NOT kidding. It's on par with PPK-Resurrection for me. I just love the guitar-like melody, really nice job. I downloaded all your other tracks that you posted on this forum and they're really alike but I like this one the best. You have some real skills.
On the downside, your English accent isn't perfect. It's not a real con though, I would rather listen to some foreign accent while listening to trance than some English-speaking lady.
Again, wow. Awesome... Just put it on my mp3 player :) |
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| Sunclyder |
Hi mate:D
Very nice song :tongue2 I like it :tongue3
Greetzzzzzzzz from POLAND |
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| we_R_DNA |
Just started:
The beginning blew me away man. The sounds and sheer trippiness = 10
:45 guitar synth coming into effect.
1:12 kinda early for a build but works nicely with the added instruments to keep the beat.
I like how the sound travels from left to right in each ear.
1:43 AWosme you are making a drop early. I can dig this because you do not hear this much.
2:09 panning AWSOME and guitar part :) Sweetness hahaha I want this track now :P
Have the bass chords build up a bit more and have a thick thick bass :)
2:30 or something when you drop it back in it is nice :)
4:07 nice nice nice I feel like I am on a journey here man. You keep a bassline and some synths + some synth keeping a 1/16th beat I believe and more breaking it down.
4:49 you could try dropping out the beat and go for another break down then back into a build. just a though if you want to make it longer. Maybe even add a totally new guitar rift or add some vocals in at this point.
5:26 seems into 5:30 could be put back @ 4:49. Just take out that entire part between. it would provide for a very nice build with the guitar and would flow pretty well. Or what you could do instead is add break beats inbetween 4:49 and 5:26 and then break off into vocals with break beats and then build up to 6:36.
7:38 nice drop place to drop the guitar synth. Seems to flow pretty well from her eon out 7:55 starts building 8:00 seems find to me. Nice nice nice super nice break down at this point. Maybe @ 8:14 you can add in the trippy effects you had in the beginning just to make the song kinda circular.
On the vocals it was kinda hard to understand so try to bring them out a bit more to as well
Nice production :). |
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| Rayan |
Hi dudes!!!
Krogen, Sunclyder & we_R_DNA.... Thanks alot!!!!:D
This meeans very much to me!!
we_R_DNA: Thanks for the best review I have got;)
"5:26 seems into 5:30 could be put back @ 4:49. Just take out that entire part between. it would provide for a very nice build with the guitar and would flow pretty well. Or what you could do instead is add break beats inbetween 4:49 and 5:26 and then break off into vocals with break beats and then build up to 6:36."
I will do something there!!
I was not so happy with the guitar melodi. But you there seems to like it!:clown:
Cheers mates!!! |
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