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New Tune: Shut Your Eyes - awaiting feedback
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| mark_the_gooner |
this is a (first) remix ive been working on for about 10 days, of a track called Shut Your Eyes by Dave Ran Dahl (not an industrial/pro producer). The original was calm/chill/laid back trance and i was hoping to turn it into a more dancable/uplifting track.
its 128 kbps, all feedback and helpful tips are welcome! :D
Download Here: http://s49.yousendit.com/d.aspx?id=...JZ2W4EFTLAU2R1R
Direct Link Here: http://d49.yousendit.com/C/23XJ47DT...%20R%20Mix).mp3 (to type into winamp etc.)
EDIT: no more jumps in this one, also got rid of the silence bit and changed to 128 kbps so u dont have to wait as long.
only problem now is it cuts off a tad too early but u only miss about 20 secs of outro. |
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| cartlemmy |
| The melodies are very nice, very sweet. The mood is pretty darn good too, the back ground stringish synths seemed like they could have been a tad wetter. Definatley a very calm track here. I'm not so sure I like the broken up high hat, it sounds unnatural - especially since the mood of the track is so flowing. I think this track could definatley be something I'd put in my collection with a wee bit o' work. |
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| kopi_luwak |
Hey,
Listening ...... Hehehe Progressive intro :P, Sweet pads/Strings and that kinda *Clip Clip Clip* sound with delay is a nice touch though.
Your breakdown has a very cool feeling, one of those Happy Sadness, I liked a lot :).
I dont like that thing u do with the OHats after the breakdown, sounds totally Out of Synch mate, also when u suddenly stop all sounds like, it was a demo? oh no wait there appears again.
In overall, this could be a great tune, but that Out of Synch thing u do is terrible, but is a good tune, keep it up ;).
Kopi =o. |
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| mark_the_gooner |
yea, i thought the midway silence was a bit of a risk, ill patch that up later.
and also, sorry about those hi-hats, it isnt like that in the sequencer, something must of went wrong during the export, ill upload a new version asap. |
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| kopi_luwak |
| quote: | Originally posted by mark_the_gooner
yea, i thought the midway silence was a bit of a risk, ill patch that up later.
and also, sorry about those hi-hats, it isnt like that in the sequencer, something must of went wrong during the export, ill upload a new version asap. |
What software u used? I had the same problem last weekend, the track sounded ing cool in my FL, once rendered was all out of synch, I had to re do all again, so all bars fited perfectly :).
PS.Glad to know was a Render problem cuze the track kick ass :).
Kopi =o. |
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| cartlemmy |
AH! I thought it sounded like their was a tech problem. Cool hope to hear it fixed up. Maybe you should preview your track next time :D
Feel free to stop by and drop a few notes on my track :toothless |
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| mark_the_gooner |
| ok, i fixed the mp3 now. re-uploaded. check the first post. |
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| djrenco |
hi, my oppinion of this remix;) :
- nice perc
- pads are good
- synth is a little computerish, try some different
- fx is a bit dry, add some reverb or delay
hope this will help you a little!
anyway, i like this proggy remix:)
-Renco |
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| mark_the_gooner |
| quote: | Originally posted by djrenco
hi, my oppinion of this remix;) :
- nice perc
- pads are good
- synth is a little computerish, try some different
- fx is a bit dry, add some reverb or delay
hope this will help you a little!
anyway, i like this proggy remix:)
-Renco |
ok, i'll keep that in mind :cool: |
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| AniG |
pads are nice
the whole song in general is very light and cna make you sleepy lolz
good relaxation music.
its not my style of trance tho.
seems a bit basic to me :S |
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| alaskan dreamer |
the link is down buddy :(
Lol i got it ,checking now as i type here this is sounding summery and chilled from the start bassline very quiet , matter of taste though hey ,nice arped sound comes in flows in to a gentle break 2:25 min mark ,building nicely up feel there should deffo be a bigger kick going on here ,but nice melody ,very very chilled tune here ,not bad :) |
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| Luke Terry |
good attempt. you need to find yourself some better kick/perc samples and beef up the bass. the lead may sound better if brought down an octave. there is some good ideas in there that need to be exploited! :D
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