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Whats wrong with this track??!!
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| sentinelproject |
Ive been working on this sucker for a while now, but it seems to me that the track is somehow messed up,
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is it too repetative?
too cheezy??
should I only have one breakdown insdeat of 2???
is this track LABEL worthy???
opinions needed...
can someone please help
thanx |
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| sentinelproject |
Whats wrong with the bass???
eq?
too rapid?
tone? |
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| tranceinjection |
Don’t make a statement about someone’s bass without telling them what you don’t like about it; tell them what you think it needs.
To me I thought it could do with a lower bass because i thought it would go better with the higher synths.
I really like the tune and think you have done a dam good job, send it to some labels and see what they say.
I really like it and think it’s a really good tune, would love to mess with it if you use Fruity? But if not keep up the good work. |
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| sentinelproject |
| Thanks for the comments, I use Sonar to produce... |
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| ASFSE |
first of all, is that you in ur sig? i'd hit both those girls.
in regards to ur track...first impressions:
percussion sounds a bit weak, overall sound is a bit weak, as mentioned before, more bass.
i'm not a huge trance guy, and not the best producer myself, but from a listeners standpoint these are the things i feel.
so basically, needs more mid bass. is there a subbass? i aint really feelin' anything cept the kick drum.
the main lead is kinda cheesey in my opinion. the vocal thing, could use a little less of that, it just keeps going and gets annoying after a long time.
2 breakdowns, who cares, have as many as you want, people will edit it out themselves if they don't like it most likely...
well, on the right track for sure, keep at it. |
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| Vizay |
the honest truth, I loose interest for this track after about 3.30.
I'm sorry to say but I can't really put my finger on why tho but I'll try.
The percussions are a bit to static, when you've heard 10 seconds of them you've heard it all. On top of that it feels like the beat has been done already by numerous of artists, the sounds are way to common to be interesting.
the part that's good is the bassline, I like the pretty tight and driving sound of it, but the track as a whole really lacks from that deeper bass, I can imagine that it would sound pretty thin on a big club PA.
the melodies aren't that inovative either soundwise, and the mainlead could use something to spice it up. Perhaps making it a bit less repetitive might help. |
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| verdonsky |
| The stream doesn't seem to work, i'll check back later though |
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| NateS |
Hi, I'm new here, but maybe I can point out one or two things.
The track overall has some really strong points - you play off the start and end notes of the vocal clip for the whole track, and that's both the strength and the weakness in my opinion. If you listen to the track and then sorta fast forward, the whole thing oscillates between two chords pretty much the entire time, with a third transitional chord dropping in occasionally. You have some rhythm changes which help to break it up, but there isn't any significant chord progression.
I think if you tried to find a few different chords, maybe a transition into a different key here or there, it might help things along. I know it's a bit cliche, but the old "it's just three chords over and over" attack launched against a lot of pop rock/alternative music by more formally-trained musicians in the analog world might apply here as well.
Hope this maybe helps, but more experienced producers can definitely shoot me down here. |
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| daeus |
Nice melody, liven up the perc abit I think, as in a more busy perc loop and different sounds.
I turned up my bass and the Kick is going over the bass line, I like to hear the bassline as loud as the kick or maybe slighly less but so it gives wicked groove.
Apart from that I like it allot, dont ask me why but think you could make a house tune out of this somehow.
Ok I just checked out your myspace and @In my dream@ seems to have the same layout as this one - exactly how scorchio by sasha is done, same wicked melody going through but keeps driving and adding slowly - so I think thats what you need to apply to this one! |
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| -_1_--Ben--_1_- |
| quote: | Originally posted by ASFSE
first of all, is that you in ur sig? i'd hit both those girls.
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first of all, i wouldn`t hit (whatever he means) none of these girls.
the left one looks sweet and who`s the other, mariah carey or something ? lol
i suppose they`re both ok.
i`m not talking to you about sound quality, it starts interesting
but later, that tune, i wouldn`t let it in, but that`s my taste.
(in my ears it`s kinda boring)
i would change it, but if you like the tune, just let it as it is. |
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