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Will you read my paper for me? (Israel/US Related) (pg. 2)
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| mezzir |
np dude
if you got any tricky you want cleared up always feel free to send me a pm/im
i suck at writing papers to be honest, but i write well enough that usually teachers don't mind the lack of content :p |
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| RJT |
| I'll post the whole paper at the end of the week :) |
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| CleverName |
| I didn't read the whole thing but since the word "nuclear" doesn't appear once I can tell you you're missing something :p |
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| Psy-T |
| quote: | Originally posted by CleverName
I didn't read the whole thing but since the word "nuclear" doesn't appear once I can tell you you're missing something :p |
it's Nuclee-ar/Nuceelar! :p
i'd give you a hand if it was a subject that interests me, but it isn't, sorry rob :p |
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| Clovis |
| quote: | Originally posted by Psy-T
it's Nuclee-ar/Nuceelar! :p
i'd give you a hand if it was a subject that interests me, but it isn't, sorry rob :p |
NEWCUELAR |
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| Ang ' ela_ie |
Newcyoolar.
Are you trying to make the COR think youre a genius Rob? And what are you getting your degree in? And why havent you all moved to Atlanta yet? And do you and Myra have keys to each others apartments? Because Im trying to figure out when the best time for all that nonsense is and I need some advice. |
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| TranceGiant |
| quote: | Initial support for an Israeli state came in the 1917 Balfour Declaration made by the British government asserting:
“His Majesty's Government view with favour the establishment in Palestine of a national home for the Jewish people, and will use their best endeavours to facilitate the achievement of this object, it being clearly understood that nothing shall be done which may prejudice the civil and religious rights of existing non-Jewish communities in Palestine, or the rights and political status enjoyed by Jews in any other country".
And thus Jewish emigration to Palestine began, with the support of the UK and U.S., and following World War 1, the support of the League of Nations who assigned the U.K. the “Palestine Mandate” which granted the British control over the lands of modern Israel & Jordan. The British encouraged Jewish immigration to Palestine throughout the 20’s and 30’s, and following the Second World War, international support for an independent state of Israel became overwhelming.
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This is a little bit historically imprecise. First immigration waves ("aliyah") were during the time the idea of the Zionist project was first postulated: At the end of the 19th century (1897 etc.), mainly from Russia.
Secondly: While the British first supported immigration, they more or less changed sides during the late 1930s culminating in the White Paper of 1939 which both lowers the promises of the Balfour Declaration and also demands an end of ongoing Jewish immigration - leading the ten thousands of Jews being stopped in Cyprus.
Other than that pretty much correct. I'd be interested in the other parts of your paper! |
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| RJT |
| quote: | Originally posted by TranceGiant
This is a little bit historically imprecise. First immigration waves ("aliyah") were during the time the idea of the Zionist project was first postulated: At the end of the 19th century (1897 etc.), mainly from Russia.
Secondly: While the British first supported immigration, they more or less changed sides during the late 1930s culminating in the White Paper of 1939 which both lowers the promises of the Balfour Declaration and also demands an end of ongoing Jewish immigration - leading the ten thousands of Jews being stopped in Cyprus.
Other than that pretty much correct. I'd be interested in the other parts of your paper! |
Cool, thanks loads m8 - that was actually a part of the paper I was really concerned about. Each source I have says something a little different, and while most mention the British decline in support for Jewish immigration, many seem to downplay it.
Thanks again man! |
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| RJT |
| Bumped in hopes that Craig will read it. :) |
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| Moral Hazard |
| quote: | Originally posted by RJT
Bumped in hopes that Craig will read it. :) |
Sorry Rob, it's been a busy morning.
I won't bother to talk about stylistic or grammatical elements as you clearly need to proof it and I trust you will sort all of this out. While you've only provided us with a sampling I'd have to say you are on the right track giving a background of the two state's relationship and how that evolved as well as their shared economic and strategic interests, specifically securing of resources. Unfortunately, I think you may be overlooking the human element. You may want to give some consideration to the history of migration of persons between the two states as well as the effective lobbying conducted by various Jewish interest groups within the US on behalf of Isreal. While the latter may not be the most PC of topics it has had a significant impact on US/Isreali relations. That said, my suggestions could be a paper unto themselves, however, I think they need to be at least touched upon even as just a few additional paragraphs in the historical background portion. |
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| RJT |
| quote: | Originally posted by Moral Hazard
Sorry Rob, it's been a busy morning.
I won't bother to talk about stylistic or grammatical elements as you clearly need to proof it and I trust you will sort all of this out. While you've only provided us with a sampling I'd have to say you are on the right track giving a background of the two state's relationship and how that evolved as well as their shared economic and strategic interests, specifically securing of resources. Unfortunately, I think you may be overlooking the human element. You may want to give some consideration to the history of migration of persons between the two states as well as the effective lobbying conducted by various Jewish interest groups within the US on behalf of Isreal. While the latter may not be the most PC of topics it has had a significant impact on US/Isreali relations. That said, my suggestions could be a paper unto themselves, however, I think they need to be at least touched upon even as just a few additional paragraphs in the historical background portion. |
Thanks so much Craig! As far as your suggestions go, they actually make up the bulk of the remainder of the paper. This section's sole intent was to summarize the history of the nation of Israel in less than 5 doublespaced pages, so as to lead up to the discussion of the Israel Lobby's power in the U.S., and how that lobby's power has effectively further destablized the middle east. Hearing your suggestions definitely makes me feel like I'm on the right track :)
By the end of the paper, our intent will generally to have been to discuss why we feel Israel's sphere of influence in the U.S. destabilizes Arab/Western relations in the middle east. |
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| Moral Hazard |
| quote: | Originally posted by RJT
Thanks so much Craig! As far as your suggestions go, they actually make up the bulk of the remainder of the paper. This section's sole intent was to summarize the history of the nation of Israel in less than 5 doublespaced pages, so as to lead up to the discussion of the Israel Lobby's power in the U.S., and how that lobby's power has effectively further destablized the middle east. Hearing your suggestions definitely makes me feel like I'm on the right track :)
By the end of the paper, our intent will generally to have been to discuss why we feel Israel's sphere of influence in the U.S. destabilizes Arab/Western relations in the middle east. |
Excellent! I would appreciate opportunity to read the completed paper. |
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