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My first finished project.
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| wotyzoid |
So after recently starting to produce on a more serious note, I've finally finished my project ever. I posted it on the Producers Promotion section, but I thought it would be nice to get some local feedback.
somekid - Verde Limão (Promo Mix)
Third track on the player. |
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| aNYthing |
Up to 3 min mark - track so far sounds quite monotonous, not much is happening. Melody (if you can call it that) makes me want to fast forward, as it and the beat are quite repetitive.
2MNML, IMO.
Around 4:50 mark now - we get some additional layer, which also fails to excite. Sounds a bit like an early 90's tech-ambient track. Beeping beat is quite annoying by now. Around 7:30 mark I had to close the window.
Sorry mang, not my cup of tea. I'm not sure what you were going for here but even for minimal I think it may be a bit minimal. Track lacks excitement and at least some kind of suspence.
If this was a story, it would be equivalent of something that lacks a punchline, hook and development. You may want to add some elements to make it somewhat more noticeable.
Good luck brah. |
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| DJ Eco |
aNYthing summed up some things I was going to say but I will focus on some things that I liked and can be explored a bit more.
There's something wierd I like about that long low beepy drone noise you used. Try and explore maybe playing with its LFO and pitch, kinda like some old tribal house sounds, it'll add a really eery effect, kinda like the trumpet sounds in Lost, coming out of no where rising in volume and intensity, but lowering in pitch.
The kicks need some attitude and texture. The layout you used reminds me of a bare-bones Superchumbo track, which is a good thing. If you don't know what I mean, play "Fall In" by Superchumbo from start to finish without fast-forwarding, it'll really further your-thought process on this track. Even a really minimal song without basslines or melodys or vocals can have some flavor and Superchumbo proves it with that track. I think you might be doing the same, so check it out and get some ideas. Also check out "Wowie Zowie" by Superchumbo too!
I'm not as convinced by the melody you used with that higher bass sound toward the middle. And after a while, those high-pitched beeps get really annoying. Leave the arrangement as it but maybe use a sound not as shrill as that one. In a club, the way the high frequencies are setup, that sound would make everyone in the club deaf. If you use a more sawish synth sound, maybe even something trancey, and raise the LFO/filter/cut more and more as the song goes on. Check out "Praise To The JBs" by ATFC to see what I mean by that ;) The rest is up to you, good luck! |
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| wotyzoid |
Wow thank you so much for the feedback, guys. Again, I'm only seventeen and obviously lack experience and a finer tuned ear so I greatly appreciate the things both of you pointed out.
I am guilty for aiming at something repetitive and simple, though. That I can say for sure. As my first "finished" tune, I was never trying to be ambitious and I simply tried to explore the repetitiveness of techno.
Again thank you for the feedback, It feels great to see people share their thoughts on something I worked on from ground up. |
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| aNYthing |
First, you've done something many foks who start up don't do - e.g. finished something you started, posted it for others to review... and took criticism CONSTRUCTIVELY! That's quite a feat, considering personal attachments we often have with our "masterpieces".
Just to add and something to explore: try adding a riff somewhere or some nasty bassline - along the lines of what you may hear Van Doorn do with his tracks. This may add some excitement. Also, don't get too stuck on a "designed by a commitie" - some ppl may like what you do, some may not. Do what you feel is right - sometimes these pieces are not meant to be enjoyed by anyone else but you. However, they provide you with valuable experience you can use as a stepping stone for the next track that may have a broader appeal.
Speaking of that... I might be posting up my shameful musings here soon ;) and you'll get to bash my stuff. :nervous: |
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| wotyzoid |
| Good ideas. Again, thank you for the advice. I would love to hear some of your stuff. |
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