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New sample. Needing critique.
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| Kage_ |
Here's a rough sample of a new song I started today.
I'm just seeking critique on what I should change, mainly critique on the lead melody please.
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Thanks in advance, guys. :)
ps; if there is already a thread for track samples, don't crucify me. :tongue3 |
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| owien |
cool cool for a split second i thought i was at trance energy :D
but no :rolleyes: anyway good tune |
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| MrJiveBoJingles |
| It sounds a lot like some other melody I've heard before. From an epic trance track I think. Also it seems like there's too much reverb on that piano... |
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| owien |
| oh and normally we post are tunes in the production forums lol but their is no rules in posing then here so ha:D |
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| EddieZilker |
| I like the lead - the way it starts out and evolves. After the track gets going, with the beat, I almost wanted to hear another note in the arpeggio, every 2-8 beats to create a bit of a contrapuntal feel. I thought the pads behind that part of the lead were also a little too muted and needed to come up, but just ever so slightly - I appreciate what you're trying to do, in so far as creating an atmosphere for the body of the song to occupy. |
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| adi_hanson |
| loose the jumpstyle kick and get a rolling bassline |
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| Kage_ |
Okay, so I revised the critique that was given and changed things around a bit. Here's a sample.
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I'm not sure which one is better now. :crazy: There's something about the first sample that I feel is better though. |
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| EddieZilker |
GAH!! SHELVE THE BAASSS!!! SHELVE THE BASSS!!!
Just kidding... but seriously, shelve some of that bass.
The leads and rest of the instruments could come up to a more in the mix. It's a great beginning. This track has excellent potential. |
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| Kage_ |
Well I've added more to it now, it's still unfinished. As you can tell, I'm not that good with kicks & bass. So if anybody wants to collab with me, we can make this work. :)
Here's the update.
Speedyshare isn't working for me atm, so please bare with zippyshare.
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| adi_hanson |
yep shave a bit of the bass off at the beggining , and i would say (due to your other post) , stop trying to be like yoji , and progress this a little more with a little more build up than it has , and keep that piano volumed/filtered down for longer , and i can tell you put the thunder in from the tales from the big room version of Theme from banginglobe :D
but a bit more work , this will be good |
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| daveth |
It sounds a bit like you have reverb on the kick..?
It's very "boomy" in the beginning. Bit like a hardstyle type track.. other than that, tis developing great!!!
I would stretch out the melody progression a bit more, because it is very epic but it sort of comes a bit soon, and there's not enough time for the track to develop any tension. This makes it seem a bit empty somehow? You could tease the melody a bit more or use some *similar* motifs (using different instruments/sounds) in the beginning to introduce it?
Nice one :)
EDIT: on a second listen, it's almost like you're so excited to show us this melody that you... get there a bit early (was going to use some dirty metaphor but decided against it :D )... you need a bit more foreplay (oops) :haha: |
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| Kage_ |
Thanks for the tips, guys.
adi_hanson, I have never even heard of bangingglobe. :P The sameple I used was from a movie sound effects pack, as I do quite alot of epic music. I just love putting my mousic into an environment. :p
daveth, I'll extend it a bit more, I know what you mean. It still needs alot of work, imo. |
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