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Check out my new track by Suli Salerno
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| Suli Salerno |
Hello,
please go check out my new track
leave feedback please! First track produced on Logic and I really need some feedback before I move onto another one. Thanks alot!
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=SO1B2hFPCyo
love always,
Suli Salerno |
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| suneel |
-lead sounds too cheap. try a different preset and do lower the gain
-track seems to be missing something in the background. like a bassline |
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| Suli Salerno |
| agree about the bassline comment. I dont think i even tried to put one in there. However I am ma little confused about your comment on the lead. |
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| suneel |
| quote: | | However I am ma little confused about your comment on the lead. |
sorry, i meant the lead is too bright and not sounding right for the track. try to cut some hi end, but maybe better off tweaking another saw preset? |
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| Nemesis44 |
Lead is too over powering, it's the mixdown that is killing this.
The other problem is that the lead doesn't share the same space as the rest of the instruments in the track. Basically the effect that you have is that the track sounds like it's comming from a different source from the lead and you just have a keyboard wired up in a garage.
The piano in the break has a nice spacious verb, yet the lead sounds like it's being played in a small concrete room.
Turn the lead down and perhaps use a different reverb and make it a bit more subtle. Or better still, put the verb on a separate buss and use the same verb for all the sounds that use it, this way you create the same space for all of the patches you have. The track will gel together better.
Song structure isn't really doing it for me either, once the lead kicks in it only lasts a few bars. I would recomend checking out some trance and other genres to get an idea how they are structure. You don't have to follow it rigidly, but you would get an idea of how long to stick with something.
You also introduce the lead sound way to early for trance. The trance genre is about teasing and surprising. This track hits you straight in the face (in a not so good way).
You may also want to experiment with delay on the lead, can create some extra excitement.
For the mix down, definitely take out some higher freqs from the lead, also roll off the low feqs so that the bass and kick can start to punch through.
Your vocal sample is hard panned to the right, try not to go all the way with panning.
The track clips so you need to check your meters as you are pushing the red and getting distortion.
The last bars in the track without the lead actually work together and you would probably benefit from choosing a different patch all together and writing a more memorable hook as it isn't doing much at the moment in terms of listener appeal.
It sounds like early days for you, but don't be put off. It does take a while but the skills do come and by the sounds of things you do have natural ability so keep at it.
Just my two cents worth.
Thanks for sharing
Cheers
Nem |
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