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Uplifitng tune I started today - Feedback appreciated
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| Aurana |
The track is called "Phobix - To Save Tomorrow"
Mainly just looking for some criticism on the elements. I pretty much threw the arrangement together so I could get some opinions on what I have thus far. It starts at the break. Any feed back appreciated before I start actually mixing and doing all the technical stuff.
http://soundcloud.com/phobix/to-save-tomorrow |
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| gr8ape |
| melody is kinda confusing to be honest, try arranging the different instruments to really make your melody stand out |
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| DJ Robby Rox |
Just was gonna say melody was emotionless, the way it progressed more, but even the chords themself are just not engaging musically.
I think you have too many "preset sounding" layered bs goin on, and it is alll sounds thin and crammed rather then layered correctly, clearly, and using stronger more original sounds.
Like what kind of review do you want? Its obvious you can throw sounds together and get a semi balanced mix going. But you need to treat things more precisely and layer with sounds that are better. You also need that question answer type of dynamic. Have other more subtle elements driving the track from the background. |
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| Aurana |
Really I just wanted to know if it was a good start or not. I've only been producing for a year, so I still get SUPER excited when I feel I come up with something I think is worthwhile and I try and show everyone.
This track was emotionally driven I can honestly say. I really feel it sounds exactly the way I want it to. But I do think like you guys said the melody needs to be spruced up a bit and brought out. I haven't done any mixing yet, so that would be why things sound a bit overlapping. Perhaps if I use a different sample for the melody as well, it may fit in better? |
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| floyd741 |
What the hell is with the waveform? Honestly, I've uploaded hardcore tracks that aren't as dense as that.
For the song itself, it certainly wasn't spectacular and as most people said, it felt emotionless. The melody is actually pretty boring, try expanding it to cover a larger range because as it is, I don't think it really covers any space larger than maybe an octave. I will say that it was pleasant though, I liked the bells and the "ah" sound. It almost makes think of like christmas or something. |
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| Aurana |
So you like the bells, but the melody that its currently running on is boring? New ideas have been bouncing around in my head all day, so Im going to do some extensive revamping on the melody, that's a given. I personally feel the pads are there. The melody was the first idea put in the track, so that's probably why it sounds off from the rest of the track. I'll come up with something a little more constructive. This was just the first initial idea; I'm really still learning production, so a lot of time I don't see things as well as people who have been doing it for years. A friend of mine suggested that I add some sort of sound that morphs through out the track, any ideas?
"What the hell is with the waveform? Honestly, I've uploaded hardcore tracks that aren't as dense as that." - Not really sure what you mean here.
Thanks for the insight... I will put some more work in to it. Im glad you enjoyed what I have so far, and hopefully after some work you will enjoy it more! :) |
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| godsendxd |
This track is very bland its missing alot of eq and elements wheres the bass? The main melody is very generic.That chimey piano sound does not fit with your track might want to change that alittle bit.
On the good side you have somewhat tallent for creating half nice melodys but it will come to you in time. |
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| Aurana |
| Thanks! I've spent a lot of time learning as much as I can. I came with no real background in music a year ago, but I am working hard at it, even as far as taking it more academically and buying textbooks, haha. Hopefully with some fine tuning I can get this track into shape. This was just the generic first version with no mixing at all. Thanks again for the support and criticism. |
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| cronodevir |
+1 on waveform comment.
You could use this wavform to design a new baseball bat to beat someones ass with.
Its sounds fairly atmosphereic too me, but... basically what everyone else has said. |
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| Villan881 |
The waveform comments are due to over compression causing a lack of dynamic range - everything is maxed out - and soundcloud doesn't help either because it makes it worse.
The result is that where the build up occurs it generates less expectation and excitement (energy) than it should do. |
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| floyd741 |
| quote: | Originally posted by Villan881
The waveform comments are due to over compression causing a lack of dynamic range |
Yeah, basically make everything not so loud. When it's at the same loudness the whole time there isn't much excitement at a break because, well, it's just as loud. Try to make the track a bit more dynamic, as of yet it is very static. Especially for the fact that it's less than 4 minutes long, it shouldn't be that dense.
For instance, the very beginning doesn't have much going on. That part and the part where you throw in the percs should be very different in shape. The whole thing just sounds very compressed, you should try to change that. Personally, the only time I would use a compressor is when I want to sidechain a bass or something, other than it just squashes the dynamic range. |
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| Villan881 |
| quote: | Originally posted by floyd741
Personally, the only time I would use a compressor is when I want to sidechain a bass or something, other than it just squashes the dynamic range. |
+1 on that. Unless I need the particular effect on my sound that compression provides, I avoid it wherever possible. EQ on the other hand........;) |
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