I'm beginning to notice a trend, here: lots of high frequencies and time based effects, conveying a simple melody line made up of simple diads and doomed forever to repeat every four to sixteen measures, while riding a shrill chord cluster.
Congratulations. You have created my personal hell. If I go there, this will be playing, ad infinity and being that I've already tired of it, by the relaunch from your halting and awkward break, it's sure to bring me the agony I would deserve for having been there.
Note to self: Find priest. Confess sins. Repent.
There, there... It's not THAT bad. Okay. It kind of is, but, really, it's not beyond repair. It just needs some more variation and less treble. The liet motif, after the relaunch, is kind of cool, for 32 measures, but it needs to evolve, after that. It can't just stay there, doing the same thing over and over again, no matter how many complimentary tracks are muted and unmuted around it.
Arcadia
i like the melody alot, but i have to agree with eddie, it is way to repedative, not that that is a bad thing, but with the few or synths you have, idk if you try using filters and breakdowns more it might get rid of the repedative, or amybe increase the cutoff a bit? idk play around with it and see what you come up with.
peace. :)
EddieZilker
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Originally posted by Arcadia
i like the melody alot, but i have to agree with eddie, it is way to repedative, not that that is a bad thing, but with the few or synths you have, idk if you try using filters and breakdowns more it might get rid of the repedative, or amybe increase the cutoff a bit? idk play around with it and see what you come up with.
@eddiewalker: sorry for this bad product. I don't know what to fill to make it longer even better. Okay, I'll boom you people next time if I get time to write better melody.
By the way, I love the style how you give comment, it's pure and honest. Regarding the facts that you've stated for this ty track, I'd learn more and more soon.
Okay, maybe you know my hear has like been stabbed by your words, but you should notice that I really really appreciate it. thanks..
@arcadia: yep I know. Starting producing lesson after this.
Stay tune on my project guys.. :)
dseabra
Well I am not a bad critic guy like Eddie is when he really want kick an ass (lollllllll) but I must confess that no...this track isn't good...
The melody is ok for me...have feeling...I love it...
The LEAD? No no, please, change it...too cheap, too commom...
The kick? Please, where is it? Where is the Mid range of it...if you hear this track on a sound that doesn't have a good bass you can't hear it.
The Drums are too simple...try to put some groove on it...some elements that make the drums very rhytmic...
Well that's what I think...but afterways is a track (like lots of other ones) that has pottential to be a very good one...good work!
Snake31
Hey, sorry I'm late to the party. PotatoChip was pretty excited to get this out, and I had a pretty hectic schedule, so I couldn't finish on time. Here's my version of the track, with a more progressive/dream trance sound to it.
not bad not bad at all, as for some of the "more experienced" people that might tear this track apart, let me just say that it is definetly improving, i like the lead now and its not so blended.
I also only have those ty earbuds plugged in right now too, but it still sounds good, keep it up guys!
Snake31
Ok, I updated the progressive mix. It has better a better bit rate and the bassline has been fixed.
