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Sander Van Doorn - Daisy (Johann Stones Crazy daisy remix) Talenthouse competition
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| Richard Butler |
I love SVD.
Ok I like the basic idea but you asked if it has what it takes, and I want to give my honest answer.
It lacks subblety imo. What I get from SVD tracks is a sense of space and equisite attention to detail.
Your track has the fondations but could use some weeks of very close surgical attention to every single sound. It sounds a bit 'wall of loop' in the main parts of the intro and elsewhere.
If it were me I'd spend a lot of time making sure any loop I introduced only stayed if it really did suit the track and still let it breathe. Maybe there are no loops here, but the percs do sound a bit loopy layered.
The synth in the break is perfect.
The synth that comes in the drop is not exquisite enough - like it was a just a slightly tweaked preset and I personaly dont think SVD would think this had enough care as he is a master of sound choice.
The kick is also for me not good enough - a bit boxy vengeancy. Start over with a new kick imo and build from there.
HARSH OF ME > but I want you to do well, so get to it! |
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| Johann Stone |
| quote: | Originally posted by Richard Butler
I love SVD.
Ok I like the basic idea but you asked if it has what it takes, and I want to give my honest answer.
It lacks subblety imo. What I get from SVD tracks is a sense of space and equisite attention to detail.
Your track has the fondations but could use some weeks of very close surgical attention to every single sound. It sounds a bit 'wall of loop' in the main parts of the intro and elsewhere.
If it were me I'd spend a lot of time making sure any loop I introduced only stayed if it really did suit the track and still let it breathe. Maybe there are no loops here, but the percs do sound a bit loopy layered.
The synth in the break is perfect.
The synth that comes in the drop is not exquisite enough - like it was a just a slightly tweaked preset and I personaly dont think SVD would think this had enough care as he is a master of sound choice.
The kick is also for me not good enough - a bit boxy vengeancy. Start over with a new kick imo and build from there.
HARSH OF ME > but I want you to do well, so get to it! |
awesome! thanks again man |
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| musicritic |
| Too busy. I find the sound to be harsh, borderline painful to listen too. |
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| Johann Stone |
| UPDATE!!!!!! |
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| Evolve140 |
| *the dissonance is kinda messing with me. the percs and stuff are good but the square bass synth doesn't really work imho. has potential but, not sure. i'm a bit torn as what to think. |
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| Johann Stone |
| quote: | Originally posted by Evolve140
*the dissonance is kinda messing with me. the percs and stuff are good but the square bass synth doesn't really work imho. has potential but, not sure. i'm a bit torn as what to think. |
thanks alot |
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| Raphie |
quite busy and it sounds like the LOUDNESS BUTTON is on on your car stereo (that's not good)
I hear good riffs, but i miss cohesion |
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| Richard Butler |
It's a lot better now.
I really dig the leaness here. The percs and swooshes up and real good. The sustained white noise is too high nand shrill - by all means start loudish (but not so piercing but then fade a bit or it will be too much in a club.
The lead is about spot on, good work.
The bass is nice, but again I think you can get it nicer, tee hee.
Overall good work. |
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| Johann Stone |
| quote: | Originally posted by Richard Butler
It's a lot better now.
I really dig the leaness here. The percs and swooshes up and real good. The sustained white noise is too high nand shrill - by all means start loudish (but not so piercing but then fade a bit or it will be too much in a club.
The lead is about spot on, good work.
The bass is nice, but again I think you can get it nicer, tee hee.
Overall good work. |
hahaha yes yes yes you are a saint man :) |
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| Johann Stone |
| quote: | Originally posted by Desiderata
Decent work. |
thanks |
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