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UPDATED Let's just call it DANCE music
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| Trancelover03591 |
(UPDATED 2/21 posted down the thread)
This one has Techno, Electro and House influences. I think this one has potential but I have a heck of a time taking a good idea and making it releasable. Such a time I have never made it that far yet ;(
Any suggestions?
BTW I forgot to finish the last 1/5 of the song so it sounds wierd the last 1/5th.
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| jayxthekoolest |
the track sounds like it is really well produced. definitely modern sounding. the one ride cymbal/hh sounds like a tad bit too much though. i'd consider eqing it a bit more so it isn't as obnoxious
pretty long intro for the track. why not try keeping it to a minute?
pretty rough transition into the one vocal sample. it comes across as awkward to me as a listener.
at 2:30, i still feel like i'm in the intro of the track. it feels like nothings has happened yet.
at 3:00 finally starting to feel a bit of a build. this should be what the intro feels like in my opinion.
the melody that comes in at 3:45 isn't very convincing and sounds too thin. i think if you just layered it with a fuller sound you'd be good.
the weird stuff that comes in at 4:00 actually sounds pretty cool.
pretty stereotypical exit of the breakdown. makes the track not feel special
by 6:00, i still feel like nothing has happened yet.
i think you should really focus on writing a coherent verse. by that, i mean you need to find a melody and build the point of the track around that. that's how you can take your tracks to the next level |
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| Richard Butler |
| Bloody awesome percs again, really capturing that Friday night going out sense. I got you marked as a true dance producer. The drop is fabtastic - kinda wierd, but great. |
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| adolman89 |
I'm liking this bro.
I agree with the poster above though, the percs are a little loud for my taste, but thats just preference.
I also agree with the above that I think more needs to come into the track, sounds very much the same going through.
Either it needs to build and build in the same vein or maybe add a break and slow it down then bring in a build up, making the drop even bigger? |
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| Trancelover03591 |
| quote: | Originally posted by jayxthekoolest
the track sounds like it is really well produced. definitely modern sounding. the one ride cymbal/hh sounds like a tad bit too much though. i'd consider eqing it a bit more so it isn't as obnoxious
pretty long intro for the track. why not try keeping it to a minute?
pretty rough transition into the one vocal sample. it comes across as awkward to me as a listener.
at 2:30, i still feel like i'm in the intro of the track. it feels like nothings has happened yet.
at 3:00 finally starting to feel a bit of a build. this should be what the intro feels like in my opinion.
the melody that comes in at 3:45 isn't very convincing and sounds too thin. i think if you just layered it with a fuller sound you'd be good.
the weird stuff that comes in at 4:00 actually sounds pretty cool.
pretty stereotypical exit of the breakdown. makes the track not feel special
by 6:00, i still feel like nothing has happened yet.
i think you should really focus on writing a coherent verse. by that, i mean you need to find a melody and build the point of the track around that. that's how you can take your tracks to the next level |
Thanks for taking the time to review the song in depth and help me see an unbiased ears opinion. Got you on the hihats, structure problems, ect. I am aiming to keep the track short so I will definitely cut some of the intro.
| quote: | Originally posted by Richard Butler
Bloody awesome percs again, really capturing that Friday night going out sense. I got you marked as a true dance producer. The drop is fabtastic - kinda wierd, but great. |
Thanks brother! I wanted to make this one more club friendly than for avid listners to electronic music. Your feedback shows me I am moving in the right direction.
| quote: | Originally posted by adolman89
I'm liking this bro.
I agree with the poster above though, the percs are a little loud for my taste, but thats just preference.
I also agree with the above that I think more needs to come into the track, sounds very much the same going through.
Either it needs to build and build in the same vein or maybe add a break and slow it down then bring in a build up, making the drop even bigger? |
Great ideas. I will definitely be turning down the percussion and working on the structure. |
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| jayxthekoolest |
| quote: | Originally posted by Trancelover03591
I am aiming to keep the track short so I will definitely cut some of the intro. |
I mean this is my personal bias, but there is definitely a trend for shorter tracks these days. like it is definitely not a problem if your track is only 5:00 long where 2:00 of the 5:00 is intro and outro drum breaks. that's just the way things are going and what i think sounds more convincing |
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| Trancelover03591 |
| quote: | Originally posted by jayxthekoolest
I mean this is my personal bias, but there is definitely a trend for shorter tracks these days. like it is definitely not a problem if your track is only 5:00 long where 2:00 of the 5:00 is intro and outro drum breaks. that's just the way things are going and what i think sounds more convincing |
I absolutely agree on the shorter tracks. I have noticed this lately as well. I have done more underground style tracks and will again - but this one is meant to be club friendly and mainstream DJ support friendly (ie, Tiesto, Pete Tong, ect).
I have a lot of work to do but I have some ideas for it and will restructure the track from the ground up with more emphasis on phrasing as you said. I have some mixing to do as well.
EDIT: Just saw all your timed comments giving advice on soundcloud Richard, thanks for posting those. |
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| EddieZilker |
| I gotta say, I really like this track. Can't wait for the finished version. |
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| Trancelover03591 |
| quote: | Originally posted by EddieZilker
I gotta say, I really like this track. Can't wait for the finished version. |
That means a lot coming from you. It is going to be tricky for me to get it done but the positive feedback means a ton to me and it is going to motivate me to finish it. |
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| Trancelover03591 |
I am honestly not trying to bump this but the first version I posted had a lot of flaws and I really don't want people seeing that one.
I won't be posting anymore updates as I will be sending the final version, when it is finished as a demo. I hope the song is about 6 minutes long, so I cut out about minute and a half early.
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