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| Seven Doxian |
I recently bought the dune brothers bundle so i thought id give em a go...any critique would be awesome :)
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| deegee |
If I had a tenth of your talent... augh.
Why aren't you on a major label yet? |
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| TranceLover007 |
| quote: | Originally posted by deegee
..... Why aren't you on a major label yet? |
Just because this need some kind of spark to shine to its full potential ;)
Lovely concept and catchy with sweet melodic sublayer guiding this track - +9
Structure in the first part (before break) works nice for me - +10
Break part need to be look at - you are (most of the time) use the same melody with different sounds on it -> and to be more successful and show more creativity you need to work on another melodic sub-theme/chords. Also piano in the from the firs part and coming to a break could use some EQ to be more rounded (a specially in mid low area) or you can even double it with a second layer and properly EQ - +7
Second part of your track - again needs some creative form of keeping this production attractiveness at the top -> like another sub-melodic chords - +7
Sounds design and choices - +9
Overall pretty nice effort man ;)
Darek |
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| Seven Doxian |
| quote: | Originally posted by deegee
If I had a tenth of your talent... augh.
Why aren't you on a major label yet? |
Thanks for the nice and constructive comments guys....i think labels are overwhelmed right now with demos as i do send my stuff out but a lot of times the demo is not even played...not always but ive noticed sometimes it just doesnt get played at all...which is understandable considering they get thousands a month....besides like you guys i just love trance and composing it feels right at home....cheers 😊 |
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| alteredfuture |
nice kick, punches through the mix well.
I like the Bass too, nice and sharp sounding.
The melody is really nice the piano sits nice with that pluck synth although i would say the piano lacks a bit of lower end, just my opinion.
Wow like the break down! Nice chord progression. and at 3:26. Nice!!!!
Really nice work mate!! |
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| Seven Doxian |
| quote: | Originally posted by TranceLover007
Just because this need some kind of spark to shine to its full potential ;)
Lovely concept and catchy with sweet melodic sublayer guiding this track - +9
Structure in the first part (before break) works nice for me - +10
Break part need to be look at - you are (most of the time) use the same melody with different sounds on it -> and to be more successful and show more creativity you need to work on another melodic sub-theme/chords. Also piano in the from the firs part and coming to a break could use some EQ to be more rounded (a specially in mid low area) or you can even double it with a second layer and properly EQ - +7
Second part of your track - again needs some creative form of keeping this production attractiveness at the top -> like another sub-melodic chords - +7
Sounds design and choices - +9
Overall pretty nice effort man ;)
Darek |
Thanks a lot Darek....as usual you always give great advice :) |
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| Seven Doxian |
| quote: | Originally posted by alteredfuture
nice kick, punches through the mix well.
I like the Bass too, nice and sharp sounding.
The melody is really nice the piano sits nice with that pluck synth although i would say the piano lacks a bit of lower end, just my opinion.
Wow like the break down! Nice chord progression. and at 3:26. Nice!!!!
Really nice work mate!! |
thanks for the nice comments :) |
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