Mate I really enjoyed the relaxing start but it all went wrong when the tune kicked off with the beat - there it became very early 90's sounding. I've been at this point myself - you need to take a step back and learn to choose sounds VERY carefuly - I mean my latest bass Ive been working on about 10 days and still Im not happy - just the bass sound. Im real bad a sound choice mind!
As I say nice start - just get the rest of sound right - like that snare drum - very early 90's cheese mate.
Arcadia
yeah i hear ya, is there a way to build drum kits from scratch using operator or something? cause i cant seem to find anything on it, and to be honest, i dont want to use drums samples cause they all sound too cheesy.
EddieZilker
The whole thing is awful. I don't want to take issue with Mr. Butler, but I couldn't even stand the beginning. It reminds me of some of my earlier stuff which, technically, could be considered music and actually had a degree of technical accomplishment but I'd be lying if I said any part of this or my older music is any 'good'.
It shows a comprehension to the form but it also shows an unappealing aggression. The chord progression appears to be a violent, stilted, plodding process looking for the next minor to major chord sympathetic with only the bass-line. The gated synth is so pushy in its insistence that it is there, let alone the fact that it is playing music more fit for a carnival fun-house than a dance floor, that its annoying qualities, musically, far outweigh the annoyance caused by its shrill rendition of a cliche'.
The break is total hack, sounding like you'd worked the old chord progression into a corner and then gave up to resolve it from its thankfully muted rest with a new, more virulent, sonic miasma so grating that blind rage would be sure to follow; a complete psychotic break if used in conjunction with water torture.
Just chuck this tune. Delete it. There is no rescue for it. It's horrible.
Don't get me wrong. Like I said, earlier, I've got many of these tunes. If I ever find the CD some of them are on, I'll be the first to post them for the lulz. Please don't take what I'm saying personally. Take it for what I'd have wanted to hear, looking back at the phase you're in.
It's absolutely dreadful.
EddieZilker
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Originally posted by Anakratis
:rolleyes:
I'm sorry that you have an issue with my critique. I definitely don't want an issue with you or anyone else, but it's my review. Feel free to take issue with it as it pertains to the song in question or don't.
No one is doing him any favors by ignoring him or blowing smoke up his ass. Personally, I think one of the cruelest things someone can do is to try and be constructive but beguile the intent of a critique so much, with well intentioned words, that the feedback caries no meaning. You're not helping him by posting rolled-eyes at my post.
If you want to take issue with my feedback, listen to his song and post feedback you want to give to him, the way you think it ought to be phrased. I would also suggest if my feedback poses further problem for you, that you listen to his song, and post feedback contravening each one of my points.
I'm not trying to attack him or anyone else and I haven't. I've told this artist, on more than one occasion, that he demonstrates some talent - a good deal of potential, to be frank. That said, it is raw talent, unpolished and lacking in fundamental finesse'.
Arcadia
i have finally let what you have said sink in eddie, and i am taking a whole new approach to this one.
im going to work on it until everything is just perfect...
no flaws what so ever, and i dont care how long it takes me, i thinking through every move i make with tons of consideration.
so yeah...
Anakratis
quote:
Originally posted by EddieZilker
I'm sorry that you have an issue with my critique. I definitely don't want an issue with you or anyone else, but it's my review. Feel free to take issue with it as it pertains to the song in question or don't.
No one is doing him any favors by ignoring him or blowing smoke up his ass. Personally, I think one of the cruelest things someone can do is to try and be constructive but beguile the intent of a critique so much, with well intentioned words, that the feedback caries no meaning. You're not helping him by posting rolled-eyes at my post.
If you want to take issue with my feedback, listen to his song and post feedback you want to give to him, the way you think it ought to be phrased. I would also suggest if my feedback poses further problem for you, that you listen to his song, and post feedback contravening each one of my points.
I'm not trying to attack him or anyone else and I haven't. I've told this artist, on more than one occasion, that he demonstrates some talent - a good deal of potential, to be frank. That said, it is raw talent, unpolished and lacking in fundamental finesse'.
Nah man I don't have an issue :)
I was going to write about the song and your review, but got too confused within my words and deleted the original post.
Somehow the server barfed and I posted an eye-rolling smiley? :nervous:
EddieZilker
Seriously, dude. Take your time with this stuff. This isn't a race. Music is hard. I should post some of the utter crap coming out of my speakers, tonight. It sucks, but I don't settle for suck and keep plugging away at it, until it's half-way decent.
"Fast is slow. Slow is smooth. Smooth is fast."
And, seriously, you've got talent. Don't give up on it.
Anakratis
quote:
Originally posted by EddieZilker
Seriously, dude. Take your time with this stuff. This isn't a race. Music is hard. I should post some of the utter crap coming out of my speakers, tonight. It sucks, but I don't settle for suck and keep plugging away at it, until it's half-way decent.
"Fast is slow. Slow is smooth. Smooth is fast."
And, seriously, you've got talent. Don't give up on it.
Pure genius :)
Also, what I like to do is to take a break from a song that I've been hammering at and can't seem to find the light. Why not try creating some other stuff and coming back to it later on?
Hell what do I know, I'm only a 16 year old noob :p
Good luck! ;)
Arcadia
yeah man, im going to take as long as i need for everything and take it slowly one step at a time, and just when i think its good enough then i know it isn't and ill keep going lol/:toothless
KilldaDJ
sounds alright...if this was 1995 lol
i dont like the melody that much but the whole idea is very, well 90s.
Arcadia
ya i would just write i melody that sounded alright then put a lead melody on top of that.... and idk, i liked the whole sound so i just rolled wit it, but im doin it right this time around. lol into the '10s haha i just got a kick sound i liked... so yeah.
