hey m8
nice pads in the intro
i think kick could be stronger
u could use some more percs too...
melody is really dark hehe
nice fx u got goin on, maybe make the bongo quiter to let it fade in
the synth that comes in at 6 minutes or something around there is too computer sounding, needs a little more smoothing out, equalizing and reverb on it maybe,
keep workin at it m8
ur almost there

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- nice intro, too many fx going on though - doesnt give pad room to stand on its own
- kick could use a little bottom on it - I like when the beat kicks in a the door creaks
- diggin the bongo loop
- likin the lead sound. feel of the track is dark.
- agreed with sunquest that you need more percs. try putting anothe loop behind the main drums
- Good track . Defenitel could either use a new kick or one behind the one youve got now.

good stuff danny, continuous improvement. as i said to u before, i feel the strucure is just a bit too random for it to be play-able, just work on the general layout and blocks of the tune. also too many ear piercing fx and the melody doesnt jump out at me.

my advice....get a good melody-build up your track slowly in blocks and observe structures of other tracks. get a nice break and good build,once u have the hang of that. u can start to experiment with breaking the strucure rules.

massive potential here once again

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merlot, sunquest and john thanks for the feedback.

all comments taken on board. yeah kick needs work i've since realised, and probably did go to town with the fxs hehe.

john as you know i've taken on board what you meant about structure and will work on that for next track.

thanks again guys

hi mate! nice track this one, i like the melodies, especially the offbeat one that comes in around 6:08, fits the track perfectly.
the breakdown was really nice, i really like how the bassline keeps going throughout it.
overall i think just work on the sounds a bit, like the main melody synth as sunquest pointed out is fairly thin and computery; tweak those nobs! it could possibly help to play with some efx for that one. also pay attention to the bass sound, it could be a little punchier; perhaps use some compression on the bass synth?
the fx work is really nice in this, it sounds like you really enjoyed making this tune
i know you will, but i'll say it anyway - keep practising dude! you're getting heaps better every time

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Pads are nice, but I don't like that many fx and especially the simple noises I dislike.

Kick kicks in. That bass is a bit too plain to me. Percs and clap are ok. I agree, the kick needs more power. Some synths get in now, ok. Waiting for something more to happen now.. Ok there's the second break with a phased new synth. That one might use a reverb just to give it more depth.

Overall not bad. Keep up!
-Jay

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thanks alot pho for feedback and tips as you know i have alot of respect for your production skills and tracks.

also jay m thanks for your comments, i can see from your regular posts you have quite high standards in what makes a good tune so im pleased you thought mine was good.

thanks guys, i've taken on board what needs improving and i'll try make next one a whole lot better

you know already what I think about this track Danny, the technic can be a bit improve but I'm sure that with a little time you'll be able to manage to express the potential which one feels in this track !

Keep it up mate !

first of all, i noticed there is way too many effects... to be honest it gets kinda annoying... the swooshes get tiring after a while...

the chords in the beginning sounds pretty good... seems like you know some music theory which is always a great thing...

around 3:15 it starts building up really nicely... all the synths complement each other well... the pads are nice at that point... need to put a bit more work into mixing it and getting a clean mix out of it though...

all the way up till 6:08 i enjoyed... but when that new synth came in at that point, i just didn't like it... it sounds very amateurish.. raspy and distorted...

I agree with everyone else.. has tons of potential...
Just the 3 things to watch out for and fix in my books are:
1) Fix the fx and swooshes.. too many and too loud
2) EQ, compress, separate the elements... spend some time mixing it well
3) New synth after the breakdown... I didn't like it... you should replace it...

here's my honest opinion... i really enjoyed it

thanks d-miurge lot of respect for your style as you know

also thanks kewless, hehe think its official that main synth at 6mins has to go. yeah i know there is alot of fxs going on but i was afraid of having the track sounding too empty so i packed her full hehe.

already planning my next track so i'll probably leave this one.
also the structure was all wrong which no-one seemed to notice but i know for my next tune.

thanks guys so the constructive critism once again, next track will be better i hope

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