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listening:

got this movie kind of strings.. (not sure i like the progression much though)

good acid beat.. nice haunting synth..

i dont like the melody of the strings.. the rhythm is standard and a little too boring.. the tracks sounds kinda messy overall..

it doesnt sound like u spended much time on this track, ive heard a lot better from u man..

keep it up though

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Thanks subtle.
I will try to change the strings.

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hey mate,

peaceful track strings are nice here, percs in the beginning sound a little basic, at 1:40, the high delayed fx sounds a little off but it may be done on purpose

nice clap and acid sounds adding later

overall its quite a good job, the ambiance is wierd and i think you have to work on the groove / drive

peace
static blue

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Well I don't think it's peaceful at all! It's dark. But a nicely created atmosphere. Nice acid thingy and gated vox pad thingy. Nice percs too. Clap is a tad too wet if you ask me, and you should check the master output cause it's clipping here and there.

It's a bit minimal too and not really my style but i think that doesn't count. Nice work.

-Jay

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Originally posted by Jay M Hi! Well I don't think it's peaceful at all! It's dark. But a nicely created atmosphere. Nice acid thingy and gated vox pad thingy. Nice percs too. Clap is a tad too wet if you ask me, and you should check the master output cause it's clipping here and there. It's a bit minimal too and not really my style but i think that doesn't count. Nice work. -Jay

agreed with Jay, in everything,

although, you should rethink the string melody in my opinion,

other than that, nice work so far,

keep it up!

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Cool string intro. Good way of introducing your track with that interesting melody and the breaks. The gated synth following is ok, but it sounds a bit too much like Vanguard. I think you should mask this by backing it up with some FX.
Really nice acid stuff then, nice FX. I like the melody progression... quite mellow, but also quite nice .. the percs work quite well.
Hmm, I do not really have any real suggestions for improvement. The production and everything is fine. I think you should work a bit on some of the Synths and FX so that they fit better. Oh, and you should try to add some quite hard stabs or hits so that your tune gets a bit more of dynamics. Anyway, just my thoughts. Nice one, keep this up

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ok, typing while listening

intro is awesome.. those strings are gorgeous. very good kick too.. love those gated strings, really dark and eerie atmosphere. nice bassline
i agree with jay about the clap, the sound is cool, but it's too wet.
first hint of a melody.. good stuff. i expected a bit more when everything kicks back in. shakers are too loud and too wet as well.
the track seems to be clipping at 5:00

ok, conclusion: lots of potential right here, you're building the track up very nicely indeed. i was a bit disappointed after the first tiny breakdown. i'd introduce some more elements there to get a clear distinction from the part before and the part that comes after the break.

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thanks TOR.

I will work on it

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Cool strings.

Wow. Big change of style when the bass and gating come in. Good work on the bass.

The energy in this track is due almost entirely to the dissonance, which is a good thing. It doesn't need to be fast to get me pumped, in other words. Good job.

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Hey

i really like this. youve created a good atmosphere. the acid sounds are awesome - run straight through me. not so keen on the clap mind. the track is minimal and i really like that. rather different to most things ive heard.
you also have some delayed fx. not sure if theyre meant to b like that?

keep up the good work

Nice strings on the beginning of the sample, really like those. The acid sounds that come in are great, got a nice dark and energetic feel to it as it progresses.

A bit more in the way of more sounds would suit my taste with maybe some points having an extra layer, couldn't tell you what though, just generally. Maybe something to make it a bit more edgy and darker.

Nice track though, would love to hear an improved version.