Hey,
Listening ... I really like the pads in the begin, and the kinda voice sample is nice also. Progression is nice, I like when the rhodes appears.
In overall this is going very cool man, I would use some loops for the drums because they sound a bit simples, keep ous updated .
Kopi =o.

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Pads are nice compared to the percs coming later. It's to minimal and very thin. You need to boost the effective frequencies of the instruments and cut the parts they don't need to be in. The kick is to far away, it needs more power an more precense. Try to layer a kick on it with a lot of tick, or just a hat on top. There is drive in there because of the short percs, that's good.

Nice track to remix of course, has a lovely melody. The string-like lead you use is a bit too wet, too much reverb/delay. A bit less of that helps clarity too. The bell sound you use for another melody is cool, but can be put more upfront. And yeh, you'd better fill up the breaks a bit

Good effort overall, I hope these comments are of any help.
-Jay

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Its a pretty interesting track. I like the percs the way they are. Hard to hear the bell sound cuz of the reverb on it. Its not that the reverb is bad but it seems to quiet. The other lead is maybe too loud too.
But yeah, the melody is really great! This one should be finished up for sure cuz its a keeper!
The melody reminds me of something...can't remember it's escaping me for now. Not a big fan of the kick in that break down...but I like the big re-entry you have into the full song again!

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Pretty good job, I like it.