Eq the beat, try to expand your hihat section.

The melody is quite simple, perhaps you can do some extra work on it. Some instruments are overrepresented in the mix, like the stabby synth continuesly repeating five notes.

Try to adapt the arrangement so you keep the attention of the listener.

And of course, you get better with every tune u make so go on!

Its got some nice ideas, I can see your potential but you need to work on the EQ. I mean, really get serious about it, if you have to cut and boost by 1000dB all over the place then do it!

The general mix needs lots of work too, I would advise listening to this track as loud as you can with just the kick drum playing, then bring in all the other intruments - slowly.

You also need some delay, not just reverb on everything.

If you get these simple things done, I guaratee you'll be shocked at the results

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okay, re-download if you feel so inclined, the edit is up top
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and once again, thanks all for your suggestions and help

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Hi Freaq
Your track is quite good, particural I liked beggining very much. I don't advise you anything (sorry) because I still learn this all stuff .

- So far I've noticed that the basskick is plain, it needs to be EQ'd a bit and fit into the reverb atmosphere you have. Well I would EQ everything so they don't mix into other samples wavelenght and cutting the freqency.

- I'd touch up the background pad which you start off with in the begining of the song to sound slightly cleaner

- Bassline has a decaying time too much for my liking, but if there was more oomph into it would be fine

- Synths @ 3:30ish mark, I'd EQ it and add delay

- Leading Synth line @ 4:24ish, I think I know what you're trying to do with it, but if you EQ it and leave it some space in the wavelenght and resonate more it'll sound great.

For the good part, the song is choon and has a soild atmosphere. Keep it up.

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hi man, i actually quite like the kick in this, and the percs are great. i dont like that intro effect at all lol but maybe thats just taste. i like how the bass synth thing filters in, that sounds nice. melody is somewhat bland but i think again thats down to taste and just suits the style of the track. sounds are getting better as you practice more, wont be long till your making some REALLY good stuff. Keep at it man.

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Ok the percs do give an atmosphere, but they are just a bit too dry, just as the fx in this one.
I don't like the kick, it sounds just too ripped off.
Pretty minimal track, it would be ok if the synths and samples weren't that dry.
I see the ideas in this one tho. I like the pads you bring halfway. The lead coming at 4:23 annoys me again tho.

Experiment with a phaser or chorus or so over the synths to beef it all up. Good luck!
-Jay

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didnt like the fx in the start
but those bongos are cool
i think you should remove the shaker from that part
the kick is pretty weird
you need to give him more power

bass is cool but needs more work on his sound

percs are good!

liked the melody but she needs more power

overall you got good++ ideas but need more work on your production

good luck!