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ok, so it is lofi.. the percussions at the beginning were too boring... and the way u put the melody straight in isnt working at all... the melody is cheese, way overused.. cliche FX too happy for my tastes.. atleast lose the lofi.. makes the track sound a little better

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Originally posted by Subtle the track: ok, so it is lofi.. the percussions at the beginning were too boring... and the way u put the melody straight in isnt working at all... the melody is cheese, way overused.. cliche FX too happy for my tastes.. atleast lose the lofi.. makes the track sound a little better

Thanx but I will keep it in that way .
Kopi =o.

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ok well what i think should be fixed first, the bass should be more than it is now, its a little too simple, like old dance from 1999
but then again that overall melody is kinda old style...
the melody is whats pretty kewl, but u could make it more complex perhaps...
well then , try fixing those things if u want
keep it up m8

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Sunquest, there's nothing wrong with 1999 music! hehe
There IS something wrong with the bassline i totally agree.
At 2:45 there is this very simple synth which you could remove. That rolling synth is ok. Try to fix the simple things, experiment!

Keep up,

-Jay

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The arp creates a really nice uplifting mood in this tune. Overall however the song lacks structure, it pretty much has one passage and some things come and go. Some song dynamics and a slighter fatter sound would make this tune a lot better. All the best mate

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Hey thank you all for your feedback,one of the things I like of this forum it's that all people it's really honest and straight,gonna work out with all ur opinions .
Kopi =o.,

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the melody of this track is nice, but the there are to less sub and low sounds in it. Try to layer a view baslines for a more 2004 trance feeling At 2:45 the synth jay m means (i guess) is way to simple, let that 1 go or replace it with a piano or a guitar sound. The song boring me when the melody goes on and on and there is not a big thing happening in the track.

work on this points m8

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Originally posted by Amfora the melody of this track is nice, but the there are to less sub and low sounds in it. Try to layer a view baslines for a more 2004 trance feeling At 2:45 the synth jay m means (i guess) is way to simple, let that 1 go or replace it with a piano or a guitar sound. The song boring me when the melody goes on and on and there is not a big thing happening in the track. work on this points m8

Thanx broda I am adding some new synths I got .
Kopi 0o.

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MY EARS!! Less high frequencies please!