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Haiku Competition (pg. 22)
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| Orbax |
Silent broken church
Cliffside, ocean waves breaking
Sun spins into space |
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| Trazedict |
3 plus 2 is 8
according to the penguin
that loves to wobble |
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| DJDigDug |
Windows crash ah ,
Mp3 downloads gone, sux
Bill Gates he must die!
Pill Consumption joy!
I can hardly walk Oh boy!
Burnt brain, my fav game. |
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| Paula |
eh... i'll try...
too many to count
the times you betrayed my trust
you exist no more |
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| the-un-named |
Big nasty bugs crawl fast
Orkin man then sends a blast
now no bugs crawl fast
LOL
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| somnium |
learn your penguins, mate!
3 plus 2 can not be 8!
like a sex machine. |
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| Orbax |
A fallen beer can
the sleeping pills are scattered
hand brushes carpet |
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| astroboy |
| quote: | Originally posted by Orbax
A fallen beer can
the sleeping pills are scattered
hand brushes carpet |
NICE!!
This is the way good haiku are supposed to be, the three lines are three seperate (non?)sentences with different subjects and objects, the link between them is indirect and thematic, or even vague and may not be immediately apparent, requiring a little thought to uncover. Thus you can achieve maximal expression in a minimum amount of words... this formal minimalism is, IMHO the essence of haiku |
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| [ groovypants ] |
I've always wondered about this Haiku stuff.
Hmmmm...
The darkness of white
Winter's snow covers the flow
Warmth is truely missed |
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| PhloTron |
The glass eye stares blank
Your socks are pink with blue dots
Tuna fish is swell |
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| bloated_cow |
Do you have coffee?
I have eaten your mother!
You really do fear me. |
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| mos man |
the haiku is rolling
more than a year to this day
when will it ever end
:tongue2 |
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